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Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
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By a big lake

0 posted 1999-11-10 05:57 PM


You have become my one love
Yet you are a chained dove
Peace of mind is held from some
Listeners and speakers are deaf and dumb
The darkness deep, and so remains
Nothing washes, not even the rains
I hear you, love, a bird of despair
Beating injured wings in a weary heart there
This soul-rending felt, is years your pain
Would I could take it, make me insane
To lessen pounding pressures on you
Please lean on me, my Love so true.
I'll do my best to guard the gate
And shield you from the eyes of hate.
Stay with me...


I wrote this a long time ago for a friend.
I hope it has some meaning for my friends here and now... I still remember her leaving...

I love you all.

DB




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"So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past."
----The Great Gatsby----
==F. Scott Fitzgerald==

© Copyright 1999 Deep Blue Me - All Rights Reserved
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 1999-11-10 10:27 PM


I like. All poems written have meaning!

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 1999-11-11 02:02 AM


You arms are warm but they make me feel,
As If they're made of cold cold steel,
A simple kiss like a turning key,
A little click and the locks on me.

Can't move my arms,
Can't lift my hands,
I won't admit to where I am,
But I know baby I'm in chains....
~Tina Arena~

When I see the title I think of this song, one of my favs...

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
3 posted 1999-11-11 08:20 AM



Excellent verse David


Jenny Lee

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
4 posted 1999-11-11 03:15 PM


I'm sure that will touch those intended, D.B. Wonderful poem. I can surely relate.


Michael

Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
5 posted 1999-11-11 03:25 PM


ALL means all, Michael. If that is discomfiting to you, I'm sorry for that.
I'm glad you can relate, cuz if you can't I screwed up somewhere in the process.
Thank you J. you're support is my piling in a raging sea
Isis, your replies mean a lot, your work means even more.

DB


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"So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past."
----The Great Gatsby----
==F. Scott Fitzgerald==

Tammy
Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 90

6 posted 1999-11-11 07:01 PM


DB,
I just want to tell you that I really love this one....
T.

Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
7 posted 1999-11-11 07:17 PM


D.B.
There was nothing I found discomfiting about the poem. All I merely meant when I said "those intended" are those of us who have experienced first hand the emotions and circumstance you conveyed in your poem. I apologize if I offended you.


Michael

[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 11-11-1999).]

suicidal dreams
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since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
8 posted 1999-11-11 09:24 PM


I can really relate to this beutiful poem it is not neccesarily dark in what most consider but dark in its own lonesome way.
GREAT POEM

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life is short kill quick

Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
9 posted 1999-11-11 10:38 PM


None taken Michael. I meant the end message.
T and sd - You are both so cool for bothering with me

DB

suicidal dreams
Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
10 posted 1999-11-11 10:48 PM


No bother at all man only happy to read your writings for they are great.

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life is short kill quick

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