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mojar
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 169
granbury, texas, usa

0 posted 1999-11-10 10:07 AM


as time goes by, i realize,
just what you mean to me.
i try, try to rehearse,
the words in my mind,
the colors i see.
and you are the light, the light that shines through,
the brilliance of gold,
and the softness of blue.
you emminate the redness of the sun at dawn,
rainbows flow from the colors you spawn.
all of the angels in heaven,
to you do not compare.
the reddish halo surrounds you,
flowing from your hair.
the stars and the moon in the heavens at night,
are dimmed by you, glowing so bright.
you are the true definition of color.

me.

© Copyright 1999 mojar - All Rights Reserved
wolfie97
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since 1999-10-18
Posts 58
Newcastle, WY USA
1 posted 1999-11-10 11:09 AM


this is really good. I like the personification played out in the colors of her. Nice.

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Garrett 'sneaky' Gall

Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
2 posted 1999-11-10 04:48 PM


I like love poems, but I still don't think there's much darkness here, M.

Send us your dark, your poor, entangled thoughts, yearning to be free.

DB

Aren't the first two lines from the song "Color My World' by Chicago? They're one of my favorites.

By the way, I'm glad you're in love, unless this is just a glorious set-up to some big dark crash of words, in which case I'll hush up.

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Tongue-tied and twisted
Just an Earthbound misfit...
P. Floyd

mojar
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 169
granbury, texas, usa
3 posted 1999-11-10 11:42 PM


the first lines are from chicago's colour my world, one of my favorite groups. and it is wonderful to be in love.
JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
4 posted 1999-11-11 08:23 AM


Great description here

Congrats on your LOVE


Jenny Lee

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.


[This message has been edited by JennyLee (edited 11-11-1999).]

Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
5 posted 1999-11-11 03:21 PM


I love reading how others percieve colors. There are alot percieved the same but some totally different. I find you're work to be unique and fresh, mojar.


Michael

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