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Scene's From a Park |
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LRAW Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 15 |
Scenes From A Park Living out realities in between the sequences of our lives You don't understand the madness running through my mind Submerging me in this shallow hell of life I focus only on the darkness of the night While the graves of fallen men Begin to crack with shame Leaving only crying children there to blame A woman in the distance Leaves some food for the birds She's so unsuspecting Not even glancing around I call her name But she's too far to hear my words I need to see her So I get up off the ground And I follow her down the path that she has walked But she sees me and runs Before we could even talk Flowing downward On the road of despair My head spins around But nobody cares Life seems to be egging me on But where does one go If he's afraid of the sun There's no where to go But I cannot stay here Where the people laugh and smile all day A little child sits next to me She counts the fingers on her hand She seems so sweet and so happy But her thoughts are nothing like a man's She doesn't see the horror I see And she doesn't feel the pain in me No one cares about anything I do This world is so different Than the one I knew My heart has be torn in so many pieces I can't even begin to describe The torture and anguish I feel inside |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
This was emotional for me...the last few lines made my heart hurt.. Well Done. jenny ------------------ Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
This was really emotional for me too.....people think a depressed person is badly off in a dark room with depressing music, but truly, a sunny happ park is much worse. I know this from experience. Well written. ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Hit the nail on the head with this one, LRAW. Excellent piece....speaks volumes. Michael |
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LenMcC1 Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 68 |
Thought this was terrific, so disturbing and beautifully written |
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Deep Blue Me Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396By a big lake |
While the graves of fallen men Begin to crack with shame Leaving only crying children there to blame. We're all fallen in a lot of ways, just not beneath the shroud as yet. I really enjoyed this L! DB ------------------ September 30, 1659. I, poor, miserable Robinson Crusoe, being shipwrecked, during a dreadful storm in the offing, came ashore on this dismal unfortunate island, which I called "the Island of Despair," all the rest of the ship's company being drowned, and myself almost dead. ----Robinson Crusoe---- ==Daniel DeFoe== |
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LenMcC1 Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 68 |
Just wanted to say again how much I liked this poem. |
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LenMcC1 Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 68 |
good poem |
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