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Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake

0 posted 1999-11-05 03:08 PM


From the wall he watches
Does he expect the skyline to change
Or tumble while he observes
It's constant immobile silhouette;
With it's fitful pinpoints of light,
Dotting the inky towers of glass and steel

From the sidewalk he watches
The turning wheels never cease
Shadow monsters loom large
In many directions from their single
Starting point at his feet
Shouts from above the storefront
Shatter the soundless noise of the city
Shots ring out and sirens scream
Echoing into the lonely night's
Cavernous gloom

From far above he watches
The lights move slowly from here
All is silent but for the giggles
Of a couple, new in love
Seeing all with a freshness he cannot grasp
He raises his eyes to the night sky
Full of depth but lacking answers
He contemplates the passing of time
Elapsed decisions
He drops his eyes again to the concrete far below
The lights beckon
It is night and dark light fills his eyes.
He is lost...

DB

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The moon was bright overhead when I reembarked in the pinnace to return to my ship. A chill night breeze came whispering down from the depths of the valley, and suddenly the place was full of ghosts,-shadows of men alive and dead,- my own among them.
========Mutiny on the Bounty====
========Nordhoff and Hall====

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JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
1 posted 1999-11-05 03:29 PM


DB...your dark light is shining!
Oh..to look out onto the world with such longing and regret..beautifully stated.

To tell you now a secret...Sssh... "He did not think he was lucky...he fed me to the wolves of despair."
If only his eyes and heart could have looked upon those words of mine with such clarity and understanding as yourself. Thank-you DB for letting me read my words again. And to finally realize for myself...that I was in
love all alone.

Respectfully,
Jenny Lee

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.


[This message has been edited by JennyLee (edited 11-05-1999).]

Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-11-06 04:13 AM


Excellent piece here! Well done!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Deep Blue Me
Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
3 posted 1999-11-06 03:50 PM


Watcher--Thanks for your constant presence
JL-- You're welcome and you're welcome.

Shasta
Junior Member
since 1999-10-16
Posts 24
st augustine florida
4 posted 1999-11-06 05:03 PM


VEry nice. i like the way you wored it=)
Keep it up

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You onnly have one llife, Think about it

DreadedOne
Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 51
Odessa, TX
5 posted 1999-11-08 07:02 PM


Awesome imagery and symbolism D.B. This is golden.


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D.O.

Fear is overcomable, life is fleeting.
Dreams are reachible, love completing.




[This message has been edited by DreadedOne (edited 11-08-1999).]

wolfie97
Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 58
Newcastle, WY USA
6 posted 1999-11-10 06:36 PM


This one has me lost. Dunno what to say. I have been there in ways, in others I may never grasp. Very good, thank you so much. This has got me thinking again.

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Garrett 'sneaky' Gall

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