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Michael
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0 posted 1999-09-21 07:12 AM


ONE

You tower above us,
a tsunami shadowing
feeble sand castles of hope
along the shores of misguided trust.
One,
you rise above us all
the incarnation of Hate.
Wrath, fire, and fury
blistering through
eyes set deep in madness -
with a single motion
scattered amongst the rocks,
we fall, now, merely pieces of souls.
Then you're gone.

Gliding cleanly away
into seas of tranquility
while ravaged in the remnants
of your ire
torn flesh, (flesh of you),
desperately tries to fuse
itself into unity.
There, with your great shadow
once again rearing it's face
at the very heart of hope,
we know all too well
the consequences of our sin.


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Michael Anderson
4/26/99


And so, being young and dipt in folly
I fell in love with melancholy,
But dreams - of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned, and die:


EAP



[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-21-1999).]

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Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap
1 posted 1999-09-21 09:44 AM


Very dark ... the imagery pulled me in on this one, had to read it three or four times before I could tear myself away ...

Engaging.

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")


Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 1999-09-21 10:02 AM


Michael,
When you plant symbols they will flower different for each person. I personally liked the poem.

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
3 posted 1999-09-21 10:13 AM


I liked this very much, lot of deep thought here.
poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
4 posted 1999-09-23 11:43 AM


Michael, I dont know how I missed this one...but I really felt the emotion...I loved the phrase, " pieces of souls..." Very magical just like you.

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale



Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
6 posted 1999-11-05 01:45 PM


A vengeful and malificent God walks your dreams, Michael. I hope for all of our sakes he's illusory...but I'm afraid you might be right.

Still building those sand castles in the face of destruction,
DB

Michael
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7 posted 1999-11-05 03:59 PM


Well, Deep Blue, that a vengeful god walks my dreams there is no doubt. However, this work is about three frightened children trying to find idendity within themselves and within each other in the eyes of an extremely abusive mother.

Yes, I am still building those sand castles,
but I still see that shadow too.


Michael

Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
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By a big lake
8 posted 1999-11-05 04:47 PM


I'm so sorry and sad. I've known several in this situation and it's carried all the way to the crux of their being even now.

DB

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

9 posted 1999-11-06 04:21 AM


Dark and deep.....liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
10 posted 1999-11-06 11:27 PM


Micheal, i love this! Your free verse is exquisite! Might you oblige me by posting more free verse?

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
11 posted 1999-11-07 12:04 PM


Strength, wisdom, punishment, darkly alluring to me Michael.

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Through poetry my heart and soul truly sing...
~Isis~
(Daughter of Mystery)


DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

13 posted 1999-11-13 08:31 PM


You do indeed write free verse well my friend.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


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