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Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake

0 posted 1999-11-04 02:52 PM


Banish the thought as clouds drift past
Truth is a lie...What is a lie?
Then march barefoot
Through the coals all white
Eat strawberries and cream
With your feet up on a rail
Look out on an ocean storm
When men float by face down
The sky turns crimson
And those clouds burn on

DB

© Copyright 1999 Deep Blue Me - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
1 posted 1999-11-04 04:38 PM


Wow!, exquiste work here. Love the imagery.
Been on the white coals a bit too often, myself. Welcome to the Dark Forum.

Michael

Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-11-04 06:59 PM


Very nice imagery, but I don't quite understand this, especially the title. Care to explain?

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
3 posted 1999-11-05 07:51 AM


The sky turns crimson...chilling DB


Jenny

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
4 posted 1999-11-05 08:18 AM


Ruminations on a third-world vacation gone way, way wrong. Everything happened here. Just my perspective, which warps it a little.As if death is not warped enough.

Mahalo for viewing me,

DB

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When I'm sad she comes to me
With a thousand smiles, she gives to me free.
--------Hendrix

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

5 posted 1999-11-05 12:02 PM


Excellent!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Shasta
Junior Member
since 1999-10-16
Posts 24
st augustine florida
6 posted 1999-11-06 05:19 PM


LIKED very much

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You onnly have one llife, Think about it

DreadedOne
Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 51
Odessa, TX
7 posted 1999-11-08 06:59 PM


Gol - I have floated through life face down, I think. Good poem, D.B.

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D.O.

Fear is overcomable, life is fleeting.
Dreams are reachible, love completing.




[This message has been edited by DreadedOne (edited 11-08-1999).]

suicidal dreams
Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
8 posted 1999-11-08 07:04 PM


Bravo excellent work here nice images and word usage

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life is short kill quick

Deep Blue Me
Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
9 posted 1999-11-09 05:22 PM


Thank you all for your kind words.
It means a lot to have someone read your stuff and have any appreciation for it. Most of the work is a bit abnormal here and I'm proud to fit in with the group.

DB

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