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russelle
Junior Member
since 1999-11-02
Posts 21
Chicago, Il. USA

0 posted 1999-11-02 09:17 PM


we should part hereafter
there is no time for friendships such as this
conversation and conversation and conversation
Soar at this incessant pace from night to night
until the water rises and we drown
and all our words serve to muddle truth and harden clay
CRACK CRACK happy masks
Our friendship is but a wickless candle
It is a model who struts and smiles her hour upon the runway and then pukes up her last
meal
It is a tale told by a preacher full of joy and promise
SIGNIFYING NOTHING

© Copyright 1999 russelle - All Rights Reserved
Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
1 posted 1999-11-02 09:40 PM


Nice, I can honestly say I know how you feel here....

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Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices.



Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-11-04 10:11 AM


Enjoyed the read.Nicely done.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Deep Blue Me
Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
3 posted 1999-11-04 10:28 AM


Two ears and one mouth, we should all try to pick up that message. I have had to learn to "Be here now," when listening. Not just waiting for my turn to speak. It was very hard.

nice theme,

D.B.

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When I'm sad she comes to me
With a thousand smiles, she gives to me free.
--------Hendrix

JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
4 posted 1999-11-04 10:49 AM


Our friendship is but a wickless candle!!!
Very well done and good analogy!!


Jenny

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Love is an attempt at penetrating another being,But it can only succeed if the surrender is mutual.

russelle
Junior Member
since 1999-11-02
Posts 21
Chicago, Il. USA
5 posted 1999-11-04 12:55 PM


thanks so much for your comments,
russelle

Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
6 posted 1999-11-04 04:32 PM


OUCH - this one snuck up on me and bit hard. Loved it, very powerful piece here.

Michael

russelle
Junior Member
since 1999-11-02
Posts 21
Chicago, Il. USA
7 posted 1999-11-04 08:57 PM


thanks Michael thats the effect i was looking for, glad it worked
russelle

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