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Lucie
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077
Houston

0 posted 1999-10-28 12:22 PM


I lined the bottles on the desk
filled with small pills of green and pink.
I spread them out in a circle.
Pushing them around as I think.

The voices in my mind say things
that to friends I can not explain.
There are times in the past few days
I thought I was going insane.

Do the words here scare you my friends?
Then just think how frightened I am.
There are times when here by myself,
that I’m sure I don’t give a damn.

Some days are better then others.
Sometimes I can’t rise on my own.
Sometimes I feel smothered with love
and some days I feel all alone.

I grasp at this moment of strength.
And right now I know I’ll go on.
I gather the pills in my hand
with a swirling flush.. they are gone.


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Not all poems I write are about me personally, yet they do come from MY soul.

© Copyright 1999 Lucille Dobbins - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
1 posted 1999-10-28 01:07 AM


This poem really reached a part of me that is seldom seen. I believe everyone feels this in some way at some time in their lives....there are times when I withdraw into myself and though I'm not tempted to take my life, I'm tempted to retreat - another form of death......I've always enjoyed your love poetry, you humorous poetry and now I've found I like your darker works.

On a personal note: you are strong...I sense it in your words...I believe in fate and I know that your world will be fine soon.. you are just being tested now...you'll be even stronger when your life is perfect. (when hubby is with you again!)

Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-10-28 01:55 AM


Lucie,been there.I know the pain and fear rolling around inside.When the only way seems to be out.Your stronger than that.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 1999-10-28 05:43 AM


Lucie, your poetry reflects an utter despair I can't tag a label to but have certainly felt in my life. You, personally were a form of strength for me in on of my very dark periods, I hope somehow I can return the favor if needed. God Bless you.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
4 posted 1999-10-28 08:21 AM


Bravo Lucie,I think this one is brillant!

Jenny

[This message has been edited by JennyLee (edited 10-28-1999).]

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
5 posted 1999-10-28 04:08 PM


Lucie, I know I can say this in jest because you are my best friend, and you know I only wish to bring you many smiles....."Thanks for flushing..."
Seriously...If you want my # and if ever you find yourself in this situation again...you just call me and we'll talk through it, ok? You know I'm almost always home. Sometimes just hearing a voice, when you're feeling so all alone, really does help. I love you girl! Chin up !!

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale


D.B. Whyte
Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 94
Crest Hill, IL, USA
6 posted 1999-10-28 09:34 PM


Again your words hit me brutally...

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As she steps off of the curb, the street rises to meet her foot.




[This message has been edited by D.B. Whyte (edited 10-29-1999).]

DreamEvil
Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

7 posted 1999-10-28 09:54 PM


When you cannot escape the pain, endurance is the only option my friend. I am glad that you endure.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


just me
Junior Member
since 1999-10-29
Posts 15
marysville, wa USA
8 posted 1999-10-29 11:35 PM


Lucie, I'm so glad that you were able to turn it around. I've been in that same situation more times than I's like to admit and twice I wasn't able to "turn it around" quite fast enough and ended up in the hopital--long story--ALWAYS CALL SOMEONE!! No one is worth your life--or mine.

By the way, enjoyed the read.


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