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Lucie
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077
Houston

0 posted 1999-10-27 01:20 AM


The girl who always smiles for the crowd.
Can you see the pain? Its there in her eyes.
The girl who always seems to laugh out loud.
At night she sits at home alone and cries.

Can you see the pain? Its there in her eyes.
The girl who always seems to be so strong.
At night she sits at home alone and cries.
Her one wish is to feel that she belongs.

The girl who always seems to be so strong?
She’s forced to face these problems all alone.
Her one wish is to feel that she belongs.
The demons that she faces on her own.

She’s forced to face these problems all alone.
She never asks for help to overcome.
The demons that she faces on her own.
Emotions that have caused her to be numb.

She never asks for help to overcome.
Did you know she has thoughts of suicide?
Emotions that have caused her to be numb.
She’s overwhelmed by hopelessness inside.

Did you know she has thoughts of suicide?
The girl who always seems to laugh out loud.
She’s overwhelmed by hopelessness inside.
The girl who always smiles for the crowd.



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Not all poems I write are about me personally, yet they do come from MY soul.

© Copyright 1999 Lucille Dobbins - All Rights Reserved
poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
1 posted 1999-10-27 01:34 AM


Oh Lucie...I can feel your tears in this...Please be strong - if not for you, for your kids...They so desperately need you in their lives. Don't give in to the pain...don't think crazy thoughts, girl. Something has to work out - - please be strong...

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~~ Lift your head high - spread your "words" and fly - - poetFemmeFatale


Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

2 posted 1999-10-27 01:40 AM


Lucie?? I'm worried about you! If you need anything please let me know.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

3 posted 1999-10-27 04:06 AM


Lucie, it will pass my friend. Fresh pain is maddening but it will become easier to bear my friend. Trust me, I know

I am here for you, always.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


Christopher
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since 1999-08-02
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Purgatorial Incarceration
4 posted 1999-10-27 05:31 AM


I as well...very well written...amazing the power of your expression!
JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
5 posted 1999-10-27 06:33 AM


I must agree with Christopher,you have amazing power...hold on to that Lucie...

Jenny

D.B. Whyte
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since 1999-10-27
Posts 94
Crest Hill, IL, USA
6 posted 1999-10-27 11:47 PM


Too close to home. Can't speak....

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Pull out the stop plugs,
Drain all the waste,
No sign of yesterday.
Men at Work
"Cargo"

Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
7 posted 1999-10-28 05:27 AM


Lucie, this piece tears at me deeply. I don't know what your source of pain and isolation is but please believe me when I say you're not alone. That you can reflect your pain so beautifully in your writing I hope eases the hopelessness somewhat. Your poetry touches the souls of many.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
8 posted 1999-10-28 02:29 PM


Lucie, I can really relate to this one. It's true that you are not alone, and maybe you can use poetry to help you through the hard times, like I do.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
9 posted 1999-10-29 07:21 PM


This is truly an excellent pantoum, full of feelings of despair. Hang in there girl, don't give up and if there's anything I can do for you...I'll be there.
Skyfyre
Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap
10 posted 1999-10-30 06:23 PM


We all wear our masks, do we not? This rings true -- I enjoyed the read, and the pantoum was marvelously done.

--Kess

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You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end.


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