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That Makes Me Sad
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That Makes Me Sad |
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kari Member
since 1999-10-03
Posts 104Hyde Park, Ut, USA |
When negative thoughts run through my head like love runs away from you... When "I can" becomes the painful phrase of "I can't"... When I look at you and your eyes dance away like a spark of fire... When reality slams its reality, like you slam on my soul... When the one thing I think I want in life is pounded like a nail... When advise becomes an echo, like water becomes mist... When breathing hurts because you can't exhale... When I lack of that one world called strength... When you are crying and hurt and I don't know what to say... When I stand all alone in a great big crowd... When emotions slip through my fingers, like tears down my cheeks... When a fragrance of mind is found, and a fragment of joy is lost... When you my dreams are folded and creased a million times... When you are my light that I can never have... When you want me to be so perfect because you fear that I'm not... When I become not an angel but a lust for you... When a hyacinth becomes a weed... THAT MAKES ME SAD |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
Nicely done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
When I read such a powerful poem, it makes me happy, though the content may be sad! |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Very powerful,I must agree w/Christopher,makes me happy to see such powerful words Jenny |
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starchild Member
since 1999-10-22
Posts 59manchester, england |
kind of get the feeling that most of those images have been used before, but nice read |
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D.B. Whyte Member
since 1999-10-27
Posts 94Crest Hill, IL, USA |
There's just so much emotion inside your sadness. I could never experience all of it, but I think that I've been ensnared by some of the same bits of it. Keep throwing it out there, we're listening. ------------------ slomovingvehicle |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Very nice, Kari, love you imagery. welcome to the dark Forum. ------------------ Michael Anderson Is all that we see or seem but a dream within a dream? |
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