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Michael
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0 posted 1999-10-25 05:44 AM


GIVING IN

Forgive me Father,
For I know just what I do;
Lying down beside her,
Knowing her love isn't true.
But sometimes it seems nothing
Will ever fill this empty space.
Rather than face it alone,
I'll accept my fall from grace.

Shadows of gray creep closer,
As the years, they hasten by.
I would I was the child
Staring through this old man's eye.
The endless ache of austerity,
More than I could stand within.
Sincerity, a ball and chain,
My love, a charge of sin.

With sightless eyes watching her
Whisper another, "I love you."
Deception, ah, the only love
I've ever found to be true...
Cuts at the cold and blackness,
My eyes watering at the touch.
Maybe even for a moment believing
She needs me just as much.

This road I'm on I recognize,
God, I've seen these signs before.
Even knowing there's nothing left to give,
I'll give a little more.
Till once again she's gone and darkness
Silences my brittle brain,
I'll keep her smile for a while,
And smile back through the pain.

Raising that chalice to my lips,
Giving the toast to sin.
A sacrificial, useless pawn,
A game I cannot win.
Between sanity and sanctity
Your law's chiseled in stone.
Please forgive me Father,
I can't take another night alone.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?




[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 10-25-1999).]

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JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
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1 posted 1999-10-25 09:27 AM


ahhhh,the last lines tear at my soul.
Another haunting piece from you. Excellent.

Jenny

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
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2 posted 1999-10-25 09:39 AM


Hauntinly beautiful,despair and yearning felt deeply in this one.Loved it.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22
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Illinois
3 posted 1999-10-25 09:48 AM


Great one Michael! Lot of emotion in this one! Described it well!
DreamEvil
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Posts 2396

4 posted 1999-10-25 06:12 PM


Again my friend you have echoed my own thoughts in your work. Hail and well met indeed.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 1999-10-26 01:47 PM


This is my first visit to Dark Passions. I choose to read you first and I am glad that I did. You echo my soul in this. You have brought tears to these eyes of mine. Just to be held, that is my wish at times. Truely emotion I do not know anymore. Thankyou for sharing this Michael.
Colin
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since 1999-06-05
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Callington, Cornwall, England
6 posted 1999-10-26 05:35 PM


oooh OUCH, powerful stuff here Michael, but then I have come to expect that from you. Good poem indeed!

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I believe in fairy tales but then I'm just a silly romantic, what do I know?

Systematic Decay
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7 posted 1999-10-26 06:38 PM


Well, the last lines kinda stab me right in the heart, even having not experienced this. Good work indeed.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Michael
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8 posted 1999-10-28 05:34 AM


Thank you everyone, this is actually an oldie but was a personal favorite of mine.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



D.B. Whyte
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since 1999-10-27
Posts 94
Crest Hill, IL, USA
9 posted 1999-10-29 06:00 PM


I'm late to the party on this one, but I couldn't get past the opening stanza the first time I picked this up. This one's for all those nights of nothing seeking something for me....the guilt and shame and lies and lust, all piled in a station wagon on the well- paved road to hell.

Can't get enough of your inner beauty, Michael. Thank you sincerely.

D.B./slomovingvehicle

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
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The Hague, The Netherlands
10 posted 1999-10-29 07:10 PM


Great poem Micheal.I think I'm going to like it here in Dark Passions.
For_Never
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since 1999-10-27
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Cincinnati, oh, United States of America
11 posted 1999-10-29 10:15 PM


Wonderful art Michael, especially the final stanza,
I love the archaic symbolism. Well done indeed.


Edward A. Beerman

"Where Darkness and Light overlap begins the vast recesses of the human soul"

[This message has been edited by For_Never (edited 10-29-1999).]

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