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DreadedOne
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since 1999-10-25
Posts 51
Odessa, TX

0 posted 1999-10-25 04:44 AM


The Puzzle


I walked over to the mirror,
They say the mirror never lies.
So I looked dead on into it,
Peered straight through my own eyes.

But I saw nothing in there,
But the cold and distant stare
Of a man, once proud, a dream long dead,
In the sweltering pit of emotional disrepair.

Can you feel my pain touching my tears?
Can you read my thoughts from my heart beating?
Can you see emptiness staring in my eyes,
Or hear the silence of dry hope fleeting?

Can you appreciate my foredoomed efforts,
Or are you simply set too far above me?
Can you taste my hate when we make love?
Seething rotten bitch, what would you have of me?

Why is your reflection set deep in my mind?
Why do thoughts of you rain down upon my soul?
In my world which you tore apart,
How could you be the piece that makes it whole?


The Dreaded One

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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
1 posted 1999-10-25 05:55 AM


This is quite powerful, Dreaded One, let me be the first to say welcome to the Dark Forum! Indeed, how can something that hurts so bad be the one thing we need so bad....good poem.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?



JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
2 posted 1999-10-25 08:41 AM


really like alot the 4th stanza is my favorite...Welcome to the family

Jenny

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

3 posted 1999-10-25 09:36 AM


Well done! Liked this much!!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

4 posted 1999-10-25 06:14 PM


Skillfully wrought this is.

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Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


suicidal dreams
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since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
5 posted 1999-10-25 07:37 PM


Im proud to be one of them that say welcome.
Great read here. Powerful and in ways saddening.

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life is short kill quick

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