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Midniteyez
Junior Member
since 1999-10-15
Posts 20
Soldotna, Alaska USA

0 posted 1999-10-18 10:32 PM


Things fell apart
crumbling in bits and pieces
The more you tried to fix it
the more you spun your wheels

You thought it couldn't get worse
that someday the pain would stop
But each day the crush grew stronger
drawing you down farther from the top

You prayed for your mind to clear
and those suicidal dreams
came whispering seductively
sweet promises of peace

Obsessing with every detail
you thought of how it would end
Walking beside the fear
the pills your only friend

You fantasized about your death
sitting in the shade
warm water wrapped around you
candles and rusty razor blades

You half listened to the voices
that urged you to step from the curb
Wondered how it'd feel to jump from the bridge
and how much gasoline would burn

Could you pull the trigger
Flash - Smoke - Gone
or close your eyes and let go of the wheel
a hundred miles an hour in the sun

Walk into the ocean
let waves wash overhead
take a deep breath in a liquid world
suffocating death

But it was twisted, gnarled trunks
and skeletal limbs reaching the sky
on the hilltop under the moon
that was the perfect place to die

You said your pathetic prayers
wailed cursed and screamed
But in the end you knew
reality was the noose you dreamed

Suicidal Dreams...

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© Copyright 1999 Midniteyez - All Rights Reserved
starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
1 posted 1999-10-18 10:36 PM


Great poem! you captured exactly what i'm feeling and stupidly contemplating...
Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-10-18 11:28 PM


Great poem. You basically caught my mindset for the past few years and put it on paper...uh..err, computer screen. But anyone who is considering suicide, or if you just need someone to talk to, plaese feel free to email me or contact me on ICQ.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 1999-10-19 09:57 PM


Very well done. Excellent.

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Michael Anderson

Is all that we see or seem
but a dream within a dream?




Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

4 posted 1999-10-19 10:04 PM


Excellent verse.Liked this much.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

suicidal dreams
Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
5 posted 1999-10-19 10:11 PM


COPYRIGHT INFINGMENT

But no really great poetry here I liked it allot very dark and speeks of things I have thought many a times.

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life is short kill quick

JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
6 posted 1999-10-20 08:54 AM


Excellent flow,really enjoyed reading.



Jenny

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