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starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida

0 posted 1999-10-14 07:14 PM


I can't
You told me to get over it
to just let it pass
I'm sure you can do it
I'm sure your heart's not smashed

You've moved on now
and the hurting has stopped
you say you know how it feels
but you've never been dropped

You claim to have loved me
but I see nothing there
you say you feel like ****
but you don't even care

So...just like you
I'll someday move on
when i wake up from my dream
and realize that your gone

Hey, what do you know
I'm not crying anymore
but you dont even look up
as you walk through the door

I cant let go
somewhere inside me lies you
but you just shrug and say
"Sorry, there's nothing more I can do"

So, what is fate?
is it something you can control
or will it stay in the back of my mind
always reminding me that you let me go

I'll end this poem
because there's nothing more to say
As i dry my tears
and walk the other way

© Copyright 1999 Ashley Keenan - All Rights Reserved
JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
1 posted 1999-10-14 07:47 PM


Awesome Starboards,you say whay I feel
Great work...hope to be reading more...

Jenny

Midniteyez
Junior Member
since 1999-10-15
Posts 20
Soldotna, Alaska USA
2 posted 1999-10-16 06:26 PM


I too have been there. You captured it =) Nice work!
suicidal dreams
Member
since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
3 posted 1999-10-16 09:06 PM


Great work you must know exactly what i feel cause hey ive got the same prblem

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life is short kill quick

Watcher666
Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

4 posted 1999-10-19 03:09 AM


Well done! Felt this way many a time.I learned to never let them see you cry.Smile and walk away.

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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