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Pain And Misery (first post like this...comments please.)
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Pain And Misery (first post like this...comments please.) |
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Starith Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 176Leesburg, FL USA |
I would love to see what you all think of this...I don't write like this often so I'm not sure how well it turned out. Sweet pain of love I am used to thee, Come again and keep me company. Let your bitterness so sweet Fill my blood with revenge's heat. And let my tongue with acid strike, Send my words through his heart like a spike. Deal him the pain he's given me, And find out how well he can see; His eyes filled with misery's tears I wonder how well he'll face his fears. Pain and misery my friends for years I can simply cry no more your tears! ------------------ We are only truly apperciated after we are no more! |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Star...I think it is beautiful and bittersweet! Jenny  |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, Starith, you indeed have a darkside to you. This is very good...though from a man's perspective a little blood curdling. Excellent poem, hope to see more from you here. ------------------ Michael Anderson When God puts a tear in your eye, He puts a rainbow in your heart. |
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Deverone Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 136San Antonio, Tx, USA |
Loved the poem. Spoken truly from a torn heart but beautifully done. ------------------ Deverone |
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Watcher666 Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606 |
I think the hurt and need for vengance comes clearly through.Well done! ------------------ Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you. |
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Starith Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 176Leesburg, FL USA |
Thank you all...and here I was worried that it wouldn't be any good. LOL...silly me.  Jenny: Thank you! Michael: Once again you have delivered a comment not expected at all. I am truly glad that you like my poems so much. It means a lot to me that a poet of your talents gives my poetry such high praise. Thank you.Deverone: Thank you. I'm glad you like this. Watcher: Thank you also. Star ------------------ We are only truly apperciated after we are no more! [This message has been edited by Starith (edited 10-17-1999).] |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
excellent, I know just what you write of, great work! |
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