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RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom

0 posted 1999-10-07 07:48 PM


Night is here
black as ink
watching
heart sinks

Look for signs
lights flashing
across the sky
train crashing

images
burned in my mind
can't turn away
can't help, can't find...

floating nightmare
follow
where leading
tomorrow

heat, scorching heat
mouth open wide
can't find you
nowhere to hide

turn the key
switch off
doesn't stop
hear you cough

silence
so loud
floating
shroud...

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


© Copyright 1999 Cindy Jones - All Rights Reserved
JennyLee
Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
1 posted 1999-10-08 08:46 AM


Silence
So Loud
A floating
Shroud !!!

I Like it!!

Jenny


poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
2 posted 1999-10-08 11:03 AM


Very neat style!! Very easy for the reader to read! Good images too!

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale



Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
3 posted 1999-10-08 11:41 AM


Wonderful work, Rainbow. Glad to see you getting im touch with your Darker side.
Love the "hear you cough" line...

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Michael Anderson

When God puts a tear in your eye,
He puts a rainbow in your heart.



RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
4 posted 1999-10-08 04:38 PM


I'm not really sure what to say, this was part of a nightmare, based on a crash where a close friend of mine died and I hoped if I got the images on paper I could clear them from my mind...for last night it worked...

I wasn't sure what to say because I don't want to make anyone uncomfortable but if anyone has any ideas on how to get rid of something like this that prays on your mind, I'd be really grateful..

HUGS all

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


Saxoness
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Senior Member
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102
Texas
5 posted 1999-10-08 08:50 PM


RG, next time on ICQ, we shall talk. I'll share some tips on just that.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot



suicidal dreams
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since 1999-09-28
Posts 343
Toledo Ohio USA
6 posted 1999-10-08 09:11 PM


good poetry here though not to sound mean, sorry if I do some things could be changed, and Im not sure what its just a feeling that cant be explained

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life is short kill quick

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