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Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27
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0 posted 1999-10-03 01:57 PM


Even with my spit all over my leg
Even with the fear that
someone might hear my cries
Even with the room slowly moving around me
Even with my loss of breath
With the insanity of it all I can't care
With my repetative screams,
that make little to no sense

It's gone
Gone and back and gone again
Left in there but tell I do not dare
Besides how do you tell someone
that you've broken beyond repair?
They couldn't understand without
seeing my pathetic and fragile state

Hyperventalating to catch myself
My face soaked in my tears
My runny nose
My words that screech from my lips

I could feel it this time,
coming on like a sickness
Plaguing my mind with uncontrolable thoughts
Calming down now...
So far from reality,
yet strangely wrapped up in it
Hissing at cats in an empty room
Talking to myself,
trying to save myself from the craze

Love..love..love is a bitch
Death..death..death..living yet lame
Gone..gone..gone...like a whisper
Leave me alone...
LEAVE ME ALONE!!!
With my hands clutched tighly around my head,
tearing away at my hair and my flesh
Just make it all go away
But no..no,no,no,no,no
She's back, but she had never left
Light a spark,
so I'll have a light in this dark
Stop it all
The aching, crying, shivering and screaming

Chilled to the bone,
and clinging for dear life
I did it before,
and I'll do it again
I was born capable,
and I'll die strong


NOTE : It's all jumbled and makes little sense from some perspectives because I wrote it while this was actually all happening to me. I couldn't think straight so the words just came pouring out. I somehow managed to change it around enough to be understandable.


© Copyright 1999 Morgana - All Rights Reserved
JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
1 posted 1999-10-03 02:41 PM


I love it.
Chilled to the bone and clinging for dear life ....excellent read.

Jenny

Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-10-03 02:54 PM


I loved this poem.....I think the way it is written lets you inside the mind of someone who is going through that, and you can feel their despair.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Deep Blue Me
Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
3 posted 1999-11-06 03:20 PM


This is a fabulous dissertation on A's mental state at a time of incredible struggle and eventual but not final victory. The victory is the coming to grips with who's in charge even through the temporary.

Rock on, A.
This deserves another look.

DB

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He grew away from old associations and saw something new in life and humanity. Secondarily, he made close acquaintance with phenomena which he had before known but darkly - the seasons in their moods, morning and evening, night and noon, winds in their different tempers, trees, waters and mists, shades and silences, and the voices of inanimate things.
========Thomas Hardy=====

Watcher666
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 1606

4 posted 1999-11-06 03:58 PM


Haunting words.Liked this much!

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Illusion...what we see and what we do...it's all up to you.

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