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DreamEvil
Member Elite

since 1999-06-22

Posts 2396

0 posted 1999-09-25 05:49 AM

I watch her lick my blood from her fingers.
My soft whisper begs her to let me die.
As she feasts upon me the pain lingers.
Cold stickiness clouds my unblinking eye.

My soft whisper begs her to let me die.
Reaching in my chest she tore out my heart.
Cold stickiness clouds my unblinking eye.
I knew her love would kill me from the start.

Reaching in my chest she tore out my heart.
My bones she cracked to suck out the marrow.
I knew her love would kill me from the start.
Ecstatic passion sets her face aglow.

My bones she cracked to suck out the marrow.
Maniacal laughter becomes my dirge.
Ecstatic passion sets her face aglow.
Of my need for love she became the scourge.

Maniacal laughter becomes my dirge.
Evisceration is her only goal.
Of my need for love she became the scourge.
My heart she daintily devours whole.

Evisceration is her only goal.
As she feasts upon me the pain lingers.
My heart she daintily devours whole.
I watch her lick my blood from her fingers.

©1999 DreamEvil

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 1999-09-25 07:07 AM

Challenge well met, DarkLord, as well as my fervent expectancies of what you might do with such a phrase. Thank you.

Michael

JennyLee
Senior Member

since 1999-09-01

Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.

2 posted 1999-09-25 01:53 PM

Vividly Wicked DE!!!

Jenny

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

3 posted 1999-09-25 03:29 PM

Wow, I would never be able to stick to that form of poetry and still amke it a good poem, and this one was great.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 1999-09-25 08:12 PM

Wow Soul-bro, so vivid, brilliant. I loved it

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

5 posted 1999-09-26 06:08 PM

Absolutely morbid, and an excellent representation of the demons that reside within..constantly searching for the next victim.

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

6 posted 1999-09-26 10:07 PM

Duuuude! Is there no end???
Amazing at every step DE!

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