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Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

0 posted 1999-09-24 02:13 PM


Nothing to say
To do
To care
To feel
Nothing to learn
To sow
To love
To steal
Nothing to break
To reap
To sniff
To tell
Nothing to eat
To hate
To see
To smell
Nothing to gain
To read
To hope
To hear
Nothing to pray
To feed
To envey
To fear
Nothing here
Nothing left


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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

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JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
1 posted 1999-09-24 03:00 PM


I must say,"You are far from hopeless!"
"Nothing" should be the title :~) Don't ya think? Waiting to read more...

Jenny

Systematic Decay
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-09-24 04:35 PM


I used hopeless as the title for 2 reasons.
#1, "Nothing" is just too obvious
#2 when you have nothing, you are hopeless

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
3 posted 1999-09-24 04:58 PM


I understand (now). I still like it!!!
I guess, I deal in the obvious... most the time anyway!

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