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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
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0 posted 1999-08-28 05:40 PM


MY OCEAN

What good is a sober mind
To an inebriated spirit.
I've swam the dark so long I find
That I no longer fear it.
Oh, what could possibly save me
From this drunkenness of soul -
Where feelings seem to enslave me
And only in pieces am I whole.

Was I wrong to miss the voices
That I hid from for so long.
Where were your sweet rejoices
When they hid from me their song.
‘Tis true, I find reception
While the blackness guides my pen.
By the shadows of exception,
I won't forsake her call again.

What once I thought to be a curse
I take now as a blessing.
The tortures that push me in verse
Have never left me second guessing.
That flurry of emotion
Buried ‘neath this face of stone.
Yes, Darkness is my ocean,
And I swim her, alone.

© Copyright 1999 Michael Anderson - All Rights Reserved
Seaangel
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since 1999-07-27
Posts 167
Auckland, New Zealand
1 posted 1999-08-28 06:19 PM


As for your last line, Micheal, don't we all?
It's weird, I was thinking about this last night. My stepsister is really sick and my stepmother is worried that when she's gone my stepsister (who has downs syndrome) will be all alone. Of course I told her I would be there, but I can do nothing for my stepmother really to ease her worry because of course Nat will be alone eventually even if I visit her every week and call her every day. I hate to think of her living like that but what can I do? I am not going to be some high-flown executive who has the money to look after her; Nat will have to work and she'll want to move out of home and there, she's alone, whatever I do. I guess it's the same for everyone; there are these things that we can't help, and it's worse when it involves the ones we love.

moonmoon
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 277
TX , USA
2 posted 1999-08-28 06:46 PM


Good job Michael...I especially liked the last stanza..

The tortures that push me in verse
Have never left me second guessing...

How very true, in most cases..

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"No one was ever ruined from without;
The final ruin comes from within.".....Amelia E. Barr



poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
3 posted 1999-08-29 12:50 PM


I'm with Seaangel here....I loved the way you wrapped it up with the last 2 lines....I find these lines to be hauntingly beautiful....."Yes, Darkness is my ocean, and I swim her, alone." ....exquisite, as is all your work.

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale



Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho
4 posted 1999-08-30 09:52 PM


This is lovely and unique. Beautifully rhymed, poignant and haunting. I can really relate to it. Thank you!

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...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG

~one voice~
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since 1999-07-08
Posts 664
Billings, MT USA
5 posted 1999-08-31 09:01 AM


Once again, Michael.... what can I tell you that I already have not? I love your verse... Wonderful rhythm and explicit imagery... Thank you for your talent!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."



JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461
Northwestern, NJ.
6 posted 1999-09-29 07:31 PM


So vivid and real.
"Was I wrong to miss the voices?"
I think not!!

Jenny

DreamEvil
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

7 posted 1999-09-29 08:52 PM


Well done, my friend.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


Dragoness
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since 1999-08-07
Posts 513

8 posted 1999-09-30 07:44 AM


Nicely done...great reading here.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

Deep Blue Me
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since 1999-11-04
Posts 396
By a big lake
9 posted 1999-11-05 02:34 PM


Echoes Michael. Vivid, and beautifully portrayed. There must be a parallel universe because I was there with you.

DB

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