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Alwye
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In the space between moments

0 posted 1999-08-16 09:38 PM


Love is broken by crystalized winds of ice,
Emotion's winter has set in and we pay the price.
Hearts like stone pound holes within our chests,
And upon innocent ground a crimson flood rests.

Fallen angels crawl with slithering demons below,
Rejection's pain waters barren soil in a torrent flow.
Poisoned daggers slice into softened, tender flesh,
The barrier of nightmare and reality is dangerously meshed.

Screams of intolerance echo heavily in deeply scarred minds,
Repeatedly beaten on by the cruel fists of slowly creeping time.
Engulfing one's soul with illusions of dark, slightly ruby stained,
Withdrawing the evil within us all, this emotion we call pain.


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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

© Copyright 1999 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
DarkChiild
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1 posted 1999-08-16 11:38 PM


Wow.. I'm really impressed, wonderful vocabulary and metaphor. This is really my kinda stuff. GREAT WORK!!
Alwye
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In the space between moments
2 posted 1999-08-17 10:03 PM


Thank you!!

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

Poet deVine
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3 posted 1999-08-18 12:30 PM


If you could but see me sitting here reading your poem, shaking my head in wonder at your talent! Please tell me you are going to do something creative in your adult life!? What are your goals, if I may ask? Your talent is too precious! Wonderful poem, Alwye!
Alwye
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In the space between moments
4 posted 1999-08-18 12:40 PM


Thank you for your wonderful praise, Ms. deVine. Well, as for probably many of us here, my dream is to write. I am both a poet and an amateur novelist. But, realistically thinking (for who knows if I have enough talent to ever get far?), I have a great desire to become a teacher.

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

Majere
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5 posted 1999-08-20 02:20 PM


Let me echo the thoughts of the others: WOW!



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Such is the way to immortality ;)


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