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A Disconnected Connection

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suthern
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0 posted 07-03-2004 05:22 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

What wellspring exists for this arrogance?
Such sense of entitlement's both unfair and unattractive
Even if the beautiful people do whisper your name

For you, I'm shamed.

You're convinced the universe revolves
Because you give permission,
Believe you do no wrong
And adoration is but your due

Why?

The same man loves us both

But!

I look at him with admiration
You leave him feeling inadequate
Is he chameleon?
Am I unaware?

Or do you never see past your needs
To another's plead

Even knowing you're all he wants
I offer this poor substitute -
My heart filled with love

You baffle me

I am your sister
And we're different species

© Copyright 2004 suthern - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 07-03-2004 05:28 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Wow Suthern,  this is good.  Funny,  I have
a brother,  used to drive me totally insane,
one step shy of strangulation or some other
vile act....

He thought like that too...
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2 posted 07-03-2004 05:36 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Magnus: Bless you... I was so unsure about this! *S* Thank you for liking... and understanding! *S* Fortunately, I also have the world's greatest sister... so there's balance. *S*
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3 posted 07-03-2004 08:04 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Really brillian poem, suthern, but I feel the sadness of it.  ......hugs....jo
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4 posted 07-03-2004 08:12 PM       View Profile for Suetang   Email Suetang   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Suetang

I know people like this but I can assure you a heart filled with love is priceless and will win every time.

Take care.......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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5 posted 07-03-2004 10:55 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

wow.

That sense of entitlement always baffled me too, but yanno? It seems to work for some.

This is just razorsharp honest observation.

Brava to you lady.
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6 posted 07-04-2004 12:23 AM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

Excellent.  I too have seen this.  Most sad and very frustrating.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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7 posted 07-04-2004 01:00 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I watch my daughter-in-love and her sister "go at it" one minute and the next they are and always will be best friends.  Having no siblings this baffles me to no end, but the line about what makes them think they are "entitled" I have heard up here Nicely done - hope you also are best friends too.
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Wow ~~ just plain old-fashioned Wow! This poem hits so hard, has such a universal theme and such a clear eye for that universal relationship of family yet not family.

I've had the same feeling about each of my siblings from time to time, but I'm only seeing it after shining this spotlight on it. Library? Yes!



~~J

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10 posted 07-04-2004 09:11 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

My heart filled with love

===============================


Dont think for a minute he doesnt see that.


(and besides who else does he trust his corn and pickles to?)

( oh I just had to)


you wrote this so well the reader feels like they walked in the room during a private conversation.

whats that old saying...
we can choose our friends but not our family.


(ykikyk)
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11 posted 07-06-2004 02:13 PM       View Profile for jellybeans   Email jellybeans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jellybeans

love this.....you are of the freindusspeciallis species......and we are lucky to have you
LeeJ
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12 posted 07-06-2004 02:43 PM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

You're convinced the universe revolves
Because you give permission,
Believe you do no wrong
And adoration is but your due


now that's confidence!  This was a gripping account worded so elequently yet, taking the reader to a place that some of us are not familiar with.  Bittersweet, many hugs sent your way.


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iliana: I keep thinking it's his loss... for it is that. *S* But we all lose. *S* Thank you very much!

Suetang: It often doesn't seem that way. *S* Thank you very much, kind lady! *S*

serenity: Fortunately, observations aren't considered weapons... I'd be in REAL trouble! LOL Thank you so much!!!

Susan: When it's in the family, seeing is unavoidable. *S* Thank you very much!!

Mysteria: My sister and I bicker... and love each other to pieces... she's one of my very best friends. *S* But my brother??? He's a stranger... and likely to stay such. Thank you!!!

PS: Thank you, my friend. *S*

Jamie: There is a saying that friends are family you choose for yourself... In THAT family, I've only shining jewels, making up for my family's firstborn lump of coal. *S* Thank you so much... you truly honor me!! *S*

JM: Oh NO you didn't!!! LOL Curses on you... and your little corn, too!!! *G* Thank you, lady... so very much! *S*

jellybeans: You dear!!! *S* I think you may be a tad unobjective... but I'll take it!!! *S* Thank you so much!!

Lee: Yup... he left all the self-doubt to his sisters. *G* Thank you very much... your kind response is greatly appreciated!!

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14 posted 07-16-2004 04:17 PM       View Profile for miscellanea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miscellanea

suthern,
  I was looking for your latest work and couldn't find any in #33.  I hope you are doing well.  I miss you.
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