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Legacy of Touch (duet with Gentle Spirit)

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muted
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(*a muted and Gentle Spirit production*)

Legacy of Touch
``````````````````

Countless years have passed
through fingers one grain
of memory at a time
moments are falling sands
overflowing from grasping hands

those that held the touch
of a child to a mother's
scented embrace
perfumed palms that have
held the heavy weight
from her husband's shoulders
so his calloused fingertips
could savour the rosy plump
of his infant's cheeks
leaving fingerprint impressions
of love that kisses the world away.

a sensation that lingers through generations
Cherished hearts safely resting
in a finger's breadth of remembrance.

Recollections of love bound
to babe swathed in family’s embrace,
reaching into golden years
awakening echo’s voice,
sweet sounds of laughter drifting
through the passages of time.

Scenes roll, frame by frame
images capturing moments,
of life
each a jewel
treasured in mind.
From the moment of birth
growing, proceeding
to that of a man, forever of strength
held to a wife's bosom,
crying together as their child
sets out in life, ready to fly...
ready to try.

Hands holding on tenderly
with fingers stretched out
slowly letting go,
knowing that this bond of love
is held forever
on the edges of eternity.
© Copyright 2004 Dawn van Krieken-Smith - All Rights Reserved
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awsome piece of writing ... not sure who did what bit but it got me going ... such imagery in my mind .. was wonderful to read and enjoy.

It's not the blindfold that blinds you,
it's the person that puts it there.

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Recollections of love bound
to babe swathed in family’s embrace,
reaching into golden years
awakening echo’s voice,
sweet sounds of laughter drifting
through the passages of time.

Scenes roll, frame by frame
images capturing moments,
of life
each a jewel
treasured in mind.
From the moment of birth
growing, proceeding
to that of a man, forever of strength
held to a wife's bosom,
crying together as their child
sets out in life, ready to fly...
ready to try.


Goodness you two, this is ever precious....the whole thing and the above lines? are my favourite.

You must duet again.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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3 posted 07-01-2004 08:19 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

very nice... very nice indeed....
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4 posted 07-01-2004 08:23 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Now, this.  This is wonderful.  You have taken simplicity of love for family and underscored it with both sensitivity and compassion.

A beautiful writing...a wonderful duet.
LeeJ
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There was not one line in here that was better then the other, each and every word fit and was beautifully designed, softly, gently, the images became alive....how lovely you write.  

Wishing you a great weekend ahead!
jwesley
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6 posted 07-01-2004 08:49 AM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Mocking the comments above, you two have done a beautiful thing here...glad I was able to catch it.

jimmy
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7 posted 07-01-2004 09:29 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

When all the superlatives have been used..
may I just add....
Brava!  To two of Passions finest writers!

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

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Well done you two!

  

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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you blend together so very well

beautifully done
iliana
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"Scenes roll, frame by frame
images capturing moments,
of life
each a jewel
treasured in mind.
From the moment of birth
growing, proceeding
to that of a man, forever of strength
held to a wife's bosom,
crying together as their child
sets out in life, ready to fly...
ready to try."

You two created a lovely write together.  Feel like I was watching the movie.   .......jo
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11 posted 07-01-2004 03:01 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

I wanted to thank everyone for the kindness of your words. It is so much appreciated.

Dawn~thank you so very much for the blending of our words resulting in a duet that I am very very proud of.  It was a joy
writing with you!  

It's better than I could have planned..
it's made me who I am...
{Trace Adkins}

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Solid, seamless and bittersweet. But this...

           "ready to fly...
ready to try."

Is the part that I come back too.


Good job Ladypoetwomen!
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Seamless is a perfect description for this lovely write...where I can enjoy two of my favorite authors...together.
TD
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Thank you everyone

and Donna, thats all you up there..ALL YOU.
I think you did beautifully...more than beautifully
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Ed, Td, thank you both very much!

aww Dawn your so precious, thank you.  

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (07-02-2004 11:31 AM).]

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Scenes roll, frame by frame
images capturing moments,
of life
each a jewel
treasured in mind.

Ladies, ladies, this is truly a treasure that overflows
with a very special kind of love.

Absolutely gorgeous you two~
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17 posted 07-06-2004 01:18 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Bluesy, thanks so much for the slide by and kind words.  Hugs to you.

Dawn, again thank YOU for the pleasure!
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enjoyed to both of you

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