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Juju
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since 2003-12-29
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In your dreams

0 posted 2004-06-30 12:21 PM


You always wore that hat.
The off-white sun viser.
Inside
outside
In the rain
In the sun
When it was windy
Or when it was not.

There was white when you took it off.
A place where the sun did not touch.
But still,
you were...
wonderfull,
or even
beatiful.

It had to been your smile
Or maybe your gentle charm.

-Juju

Some more charector sketches for you all.

© Copyright 2004 Juju - All Rights Reserved
iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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USA
1 posted 2004-06-30 12:33 PM


So cute, Juju -- you have an observant eye!
froggy
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since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893
Michigan
2 posted 2004-06-30 01:22 AM


Your poem fits my husband lol
Love it Juju

:-)

anawnda
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since 2002-07-26
Posts 113

3 posted 2004-06-30 02:03 AM


this poem says a lot about you too....
great write =)

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
4 posted 2004-06-30 04:12 AM


nicely done
Kevo
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since 2004-06-02
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Navarro County, Texas, USA
5 posted 2004-06-30 04:21 AM


Touching poem.  It's those subtle things you cherish the most and miss the most.  My wife once told me that if I passed on things like my ball caps, hats, boots, flannels, she would keep them all.  I guess it's kind of like smelling my sons blanket when I haven't seen him for a couple of weeks.  Things like the hat in your poem are attributes we take in on a personal level trying to absorb a piece of them into us.  Strange phenomenon.  We don't really talk about it but we all do it.  You write about it very well here.  I appreciate it.  It makes me think about those subtle things I cherish in my wife and loved ones.

Warm regards,

Kevin

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2004-07-01 03:19 PM


Kevin writes the nicest responses...
so, "ditto".

Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
7 posted 2004-07-01 06:24 PM


Well thank you every one.
Kevo- exactly, I try to capture that when I write.

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