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all the way to venus and back |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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corners there have been many and i’m tired of right-angled surprises the way they bend my days into curves i orbit around without batting an eye or curl of lip finding myself losing it all the way to venus and back where rivers wander and goddesses collide with the dawn the great sea lectures me in frozen resemblance and i wonder if i could skate into her wakeful horizon wet bottomed and all to rest at witch’s shore arms and legs tangled in greet The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"and i’m tired of right-angled surprises the way they bend my days into curves" and... "to rest at witch’s shore arms and legs tangled in greet" OMG Maree!! I love this!!!!! ..and I'm keeping it!  Hugs YOU! Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Popping in between chores to enjoy this dream of a poem... "to rest at witch’s shore arms and legs tangled in greet" Well, sure. But I get to keep the remote, right? gleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee love you luscious, and yes--this is the most poetical expression of frustration I've encountered today-- "and i’m tired of right-angled surprises the way they bend my days into curves" Nodding...it's damned annoying. Hugs you. I go cook now.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Dark Angel, WOW what a day you've had.... that's a long way there and back! Enjoyed.  ......jo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"and i’m tired of right-angled surprises the way they bend my days into curves" =============================== oh man i love that verse........ "the great sea lectures me in frozen resemblance and i wonder if i could skate into her wakeful horizon wet bottomed and all" ========================== what a very cool verse that is... love the imagery of this unique write Maree girlie... and this ................... "to rest at witch’s shore arms and legs tangled in greet" ================================= I'd pay good money to see it rofl |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Much enjoyed the feel of this, well done.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree You travel ...pack light, and ride the words! You'll be fine! Loved this poem! |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
"i orbit around without batting an eye or curl of lip finding myself losing it all the way to venus and back" ``````````````````````````````````` *nodding* in appreciation of your talent, and *nodding* in acknowledgement that "i feel these days too, just the same" beautiful you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
understanding this well |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Maree, Your poem here as well as other posts are so incredibly evocative, vivid, and thought provoking that I struggle with finding the right words to reply. None seem to do justice to the clarity, brilliance, and deftness of your words. Your poems are among the favorites of mine to absorb. I find no faults in your construction, your flow, or your messages. All of them on a grand scale leaving me wanting of more to read. High caliber writing...as usual. Warm regards my poetic friend, Kevin |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Enchantress, thank you sweetie.. glad you loved it.. HUGS back at ya M'lady Serenity, oh you can keep the remote if ya like, but I'd doubt you'd get the chance to use it Love ya and Thank you. iliana, yes what a day indeed and yes a long way there and back..if only I could. Thank you for your lovely reply. Janet Marie, giggling with ya and thank you so very much. Susan, glad you enjoyed, thanks for stopping by. Martie, thank you beautiful lady. And beautiful you... Dawn.. thank you passing shadows... thank you Kevo, umm, thank you so much for your kind words, you've made me  Thank you all so much for your time and you wonderful comments. They're so much appreciated. Maree. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Methinks me will adopt your muse... you ARE done with him, aren't you? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
First I'm going to tell you that I l@ve this, then i'm going to take a cold shower.. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Well, I dunno. smile. I thought we could wait for dawn and press some mute buttons... giggles, hugs, and winks! (and more food for Raph ) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Raphy, thanks bello glad you "l@ve" it. So was it long? The shower? heh. hey Gorgeous.. "I thought we could wait for dawn and press some mute buttons..." why wait for the dawn? lol Hugs all and thanx  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
"where rivers wander and goddesses collide with the dawn" I'll take two tickets please. One for me, and one for my muse. We need to escape the rat race here on earth. Great write, indeed. Sincerely, Reg |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
the great sea lectures me in frozen resemblance and i wonder if i could skate into her wakeful horizon wet bottomed and all to rest at witch’s shore arms and legs tangled in greet What an intelligent reference, you are certainly communicative through your images and employ a great message throughout Thank you for sharing |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
any trip to Venus, should include lunch... the journey can be a long one... and we tend to get hungry after while.. as usual, dear, nicely done. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
hf And I thought it was just because I had a ...ahem, "dirty mind" yessir! this is a gem! Poetry.... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
How lovely this is! You have a gift, dear poet! Corinne |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
and i’m tired of right-angled surprises the way they bend my days into curves Looks like you're sporting some pretty fancy skates Ms. Maree! I really loved this!! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
miss you lady!  |
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