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all the way to venus and back

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Dark Angel
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0 posted 06-29-2004 05:15 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel

corners
there have been many

and i’m tired of right-angled surprises
the way they bend my days
into curves

i orbit around without batting an eye
or curl of lip
finding myself losing it

all the way to venus and back

where rivers wander and goddesses
collide with the dawn

the great sea
lectures me in frozen resemblance
and i wonder if i could skate into
her wakeful horizon
wet bottomed and all

to rest at witch’s shore
arms and legs tangled in greet

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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Enchantress
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Somewhere in time~


1 posted 06-29-2004 05:24 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

"and i’m tired of right-angled surprises
the way they bend my days
into curves"

and...

"to rest at witch’s shore
arms and legs tangled in greet"

OMG Maree!!  I love this!!!!!
..and I'm keeping it!
Hugs YOU!

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

serenity blaze
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2 posted 06-29-2004 05:38 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Popping in between chores to enjoy this dream of a poem...

"to rest at witch’s shore
arms and legs tangled in greet"

Well, sure. But I get to keep the remote, right?

gleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

love you luscious, and yes--this is the most poetical expression of frustration I've encountered today--

"and i’m tired of right-angled surprises
the way they bend my days
into curves"

Nodding...it's damned annoying.

Hugs you.

I go cook now.



iliana
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3 posted 06-29-2004 05:49 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Dark Angel, WOW what a day you've had.... that's a long way there and back!  Enjoyed.   ......jo
Janet Marie
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4 posted 06-29-2004 07:41 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

"and i’m tired of right-angled surprises
the way they bend my days
into curves"
===============================

oh man i love that verse........


"the great sea
lectures me in frozen resemblance
and i wonder if i could skate into
her wakeful horizon
wet bottomed and all"
==========================

what a very cool verse that is...
love the imagery of this unique write Maree girlie...

and this ...................

"to rest at witch’s shore
arms and legs tangled in greet"
=================================

I'd pay good money to see it   rofl


Susan
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5 posted 06-29-2004 08:54 PM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

Much enjoyed the feel of this, well done.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Martie
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6 posted 06-29-2004 10:11 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Maree

You travel ...pack light, and ride the words!  You'll be fine!  Loved this poem!  
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7 posted 06-30-2004 12:07 AM       View Profile for muted   Email muted   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for muted

"i orbit around without batting an eye
or curl of lip
finding myself losing it

all the way to venus and back"
```````````````````````````````````
*nodding* in appreciation of your talent, and *nodding* in acknowledgement that "i feel these days too, just the same"

beautiful you
passing shadows
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8 posted 06-30-2004 04:27 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

understanding this well
Kevo
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9 posted 06-30-2004 04:35 AM       View Profile for Kevo   Email Kevo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kevo's Home Page   View IP for Kevo

Maree,

Your poem here as well as other posts are so incredibly evocative, vivid, and thought provoking that I struggle with finding the right words to reply.  None seem to do justice to the clarity, brilliance, and deftness of your words.  Your poems are among the favorites of mine to absorb.  I find no faults in your construction, your flow, or your messages.  All of them on a grand scale leaving me wanting of more to read.  High caliber writing...as usual.

Warm regards my poetic friend,

Kevin
Dark Angel
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10 posted 06-30-2004 05:44 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Enchantress, thank you sweetie.. glad you loved it.. HUGS back at ya

M'lady Serenity, oh you can keep the remote if ya like, but I'd doubt you'd get the chance to use it  
Love ya and Thank you.

iliana, yes what a day indeed and yes a long way there and back..if only I could. Thank you for your lovely reply.

Janet Marie, giggling with ya and thank you so very much.

Susan, glad you enjoyed, thanks for stopping by.

Martie, thank you beautiful lady.

And beautiful you... Dawn.. thank you

passing shadows... thank you

Kevo, umm, thank you so much for your kind words, you've made me

Thank you all so much for your time and you wonderful comments. They're so much appreciated.

Maree.

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Sunshine
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11 posted 06-30-2004 02:12 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Methinks me will adopt your muse...

you ARE done with him, aren't you?
Aenimal
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the ass-end of space


12 posted 06-30-2004 11:19 PM       View Profile for Aenimal   Email Aenimal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aenimal

First I'm going to tell you that I l@ve this, then i'm going to take a cold shower..
serenity blaze
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13 posted 06-30-2004 11:22 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Well, I dunno.

smile.

I thought we could wait for dawn and press some mute buttons...

giggles, hugs, and winks!

(and more food for Raph )



Dark Angel
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14 posted 07-01-2004 04:58 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Raphy, thanks bello glad you "l@ve" it. So was it long? The shower? heh.

hey Gorgeous..

"I thought we could wait for dawn and press some mute buttons..."

why wait for the dawn? lol

Hugs all and thanx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

rwood
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15 posted 07-01-2004 07:27 AM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

"where rivers wander and goddesses
collide with the dawn"

I'll take two tickets please. One for me, and one for my muse. We need to escape the rat race here on earth. Great write, indeed.

Sincerely,
Reg
LeeJ
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16 posted 07-01-2004 07:51 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

the great sea
lectures me in frozen resemblance
and i wonder if i could skate into
her wakeful horizon
wet bottomed and all

to rest at witch’s shore
arms and legs tangled in greet

What an intelligent reference, you are certainly communicative through your images
and employ a great message throughout
Thank you for sharing
Cpat Hair
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17 posted 07-01-2004 08:17 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

any trip to Venus, should include lunch... the journey can be a long one... and we tend to get hungry after while..


as usual, dear, nicely done.
wranx
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18 posted 07-01-2004 05:16 PM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

hf

And I thought it was just because I had a ...ahem, "dirty mind"

yessir! this is a gem!

       Poetry....
Corinne
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19 posted 07-01-2004 08:09 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

How lovely this is! You have a gift, dear poet!


Corinne
BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside


20 posted 07-01-2004 08:22 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

and i’m tired of right-angled surprises
the way they bend my days
into curves

Looks like you're sporting some pretty fancy skates Ms. Maree!

I really loved this!!

serenity blaze
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21 posted 07-19-2004 06:04 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

miss you lady!
 
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