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When I Depart

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Ratleader
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0 posted 06-29-2004 10:45 AM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader


When I Depart


when I depart
someday
some
day

before I drift
away into the
jade and opal
waves of
forever

do me this
parting
gift
your eyes
in my last
moments

look
into me
again
touch spirit
let your
eyes

as close as
this
close as
love
whisper
into me
as they do
now

let them be
the last
thing
I will
see

© Copyright 2004 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 06-29-2004 10:47 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

look
into me
again
touch spirit
let your
eyes

...

whisper
into me
as they do
now

...

Bravo, Sir...Bravo...
Martie
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2 posted 06-29-2004 10:50 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Ed

A passionate plea and beautiful as a sigh, but oh so sad.  
miscellanea
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OH


3 posted 06-29-2004 11:26 AM       View Profile for miscellanea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miscellanea

smiling at you...  don't go anywhere-ya hear?
           miscellanea
LeeJ
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4 posted 06-29-2004 11:28 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

  & a big thumbs up  marvelous writing with such powerful emotions...beautifully done.

rwood
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5 posted 06-29-2004 11:32 AM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

"before I drift
away into the
jade and opal
waves of
forever"

Your forever is beautiful...but I hope the eyes keep you grounded for a long and happy life.

Sincerely,
Reg
passing shadows
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6 posted 06-29-2004 12:31 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

very touching
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7 posted 06-29-2004 02:39 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

before I drift
away into the
jade and opal
waves of
forever

Even as my eyes fill with tears, they blink with amazement and appreciation for your incredible images. *S*

This is one of your best, my friend... more... it's one of THE best I've ever read. *S* Poems just don't get more loving... or lovely. *S*

But if you can delay that departure another 60-70 years or so... I'm sure many of us would be grateful??? *G*
iliana
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8 posted 06-29-2004 05:29 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

That would be a look worth waiting for, I'm sure.........beautiful poem, RATL!   .....jo
Susan
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9 posted 06-29-2004 07:00 PM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

This is sorrowful to me, for it makes me think of looking into my mother's eyes as she faded and was lost to me.  

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Janet Marie
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10 posted 06-29-2004 07:49 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

my my, this is a beauty...indeed indeed..
a true soul mate poem.
very very lovely poet sir.
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11 posted 06-29-2004 07:51 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

very nice
but class has not been dismissed yet
so you can't go anywhere
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12 posted 10-13-2007 12:42 PM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

When it is my turn to depart this lovely life, I hope to have someone take the time to rock me in a big 'ole rocking chair and lull me to sleep. That would be leaving this world as I came, knowing the love that kept me. enjoyed, "late"    
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