navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #32 » Ring of Promise
Open Poetry #32
Post A Reply Post New Topic Ring of Promise Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida

0 posted 2004-06-28 02:00 PM



Draw a circle around me
touch my center.
Kiss the broken parts
make them live.
Breathe me born
free of sin.
It’s not who I am
but where I’ve been

And so it is for you.

Similar circumstance
begets understanding.
How it began.
Now another season warming
bringing need
for more than what is.
Draw a circle
tell me you love me
and I will walk the rest
of this life with you.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

© Copyright 2004 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
1 posted 2004-06-28 02:04 PM


He'd be a fool not to tell you that he loves you! He'd be losing a wonderful partner for life!

~ Wishing you a ring of fulfilled promises!

Linda

gemjop
Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
2 posted 2004-06-28 02:17 PM


It’s not who I am
but where I’ve been

And so it is for you.
Uh-huh. A timeless message, I hope it gets through. Moving stuff, susan.

Susan
Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
3 posted 2004-06-28 11:42 PM


Truly enjoyed.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

ctowen
Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT
4 posted 2004-06-29 02:31 AM


Now I feel like going out for a stroll!!!

               I, for one, must be lousy at tying knots ...
                    ... too many moons I have walked alone.


                 Enjoyed this!    *S

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
5 posted 2004-06-29 08:36 AM


Thank you all!!!  

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Duncan
Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

6 posted 2004-06-29 12:20 PM


"Draw a circle
tell me you love me
and I will walk the rest
of this life with you."

I really like the image I get when I read "Draw a circle" and the repetitve use of the line.  Very effective Myrtle...  


Cpat Hair
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

7 posted 2004-06-29 01:41 PM


very nice...

  a big chief tablet and a crayon

hope that someone draws the circle well..


iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
8 posted 2004-06-29 01:57 PM


Susan -- what a great way to express your feelings; terrific imagery.  Loved it and hope you are enveloped in that ring of promise!   ....jo
Ericc
Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178

9 posted 2004-06-29 04:15 PM


Perfect.

Eric

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #32 » Ring of Promise

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary