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Kethry
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0 posted 2004-06-26 10:43 PM


Some wounds never heal
Some hurts go too deep
Sometimes dreams congeal
To curdle in your sleep

Sometimes life is cruel
Someone takes the fall
But baby that's the rule
And no-one has it all

Some folk never learn
Persisting in their dreams
And some will crash and burn
To end their life in screams

Someday life will change
And God will come again
And fates will re-arrange
To take away all pain

When fate that day is sealed
And life has dripped away
Your wounds shall all be healed
And you will learn to pray

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



© Copyright 2004 Lynne Dale - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-06-26 11:03 PM


Some do learn, Keth...
usually?  In the nick of time...
and worry that they won't be heard.

I believe, however, that they are
always watched, regardless.




Kethry
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2 posted 2004-06-26 11:59 PM


I believe so too Sunshine.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Susan
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3 posted 2004-06-27 12:34 PM


Yes, someday.  And it is so, that when things become their worst, people remember what has been within them all along, the knowlege that there is more than mere mortality.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

passing shadows
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4 posted 2004-06-27 12:46 PM


awesome rhyme scheme and theme!
iliana
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5 posted 2004-06-27 04:38 PM


All the comments above echo my feelings.  Enjoyed your poem, Kethry -- good write!
vandana
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6 posted 2004-06-27 04:40 PM


enjoy your read
EvocativeVerse2
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7 posted 2004-06-27 04:40 PM


Hello Kethry. I like this. It is cute...playful. It has a nice flow to the words and made for a very easy read. Well done. I really must watch out for more of your work.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Dark Angel
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8 posted 2004-06-27 04:58 PM


Yup, someday Lynne..it's always a pleasure to read you.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

suthern
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9 posted 2004-06-28 10:59 AM


Sometimes life is cruel
Someone takes the fall
But baby that's the rule
And no-one has it all

Some folk never learn
Persisting in their dreams
And some will crash and burn
To end their life in screams

But I'm blonde... what do you expect? *G*

Sorry, my friend... I couldn't resist. *S* You know I understand and agree... even if right now, I'm hoping unspoken, incoherent prayers are heard and understood. *S*

Beautiful work!!

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