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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2004-06-26 07:14 AM


The Ride

Rode an echo slammed in a wall
Caught in the fall bounced like a ball
Down a mountain spilled a fountain
Started to spin and do it again.

I challenge the echoes repeat
The gravity of its receipt
The power of its grace and rhyme
Impressions in the sands of time

I know that echoes will grow gray
It cannot change the changing way
They live within a moments stir
Perhaps the ones that you prefer

They form the very link of seem
They are the lace within a dream
They are the rue or grace of style
They are the Fulsome of your wile

Echoes are a favors wave
A remnant of the knave or brave

© Copyright 2004 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2004-06-26 07:57 AM


I challenge the echoes repeat
The gravity of its receipt
The power of its grace and rhyme
Impressions in the sands of time

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and that will be the coolest verse I read today!!!

I adore the brilliance in the intend of those first two lines of it....
sometimes I wonder if ya really know just how groovy you are.  


Your rhymes will echo off these walls for as long as this moth has breath, winkies, and fingers to type


*ww*




Earth Angel
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2 posted 2004-06-26 09:13 AM


My Dear Sweet Sonneteering Angel Man ~

There be power, grace and rhyme in the echo of thy poetry and thy mots live beyond a moments stir in the hearts of thy avid readers!

Angel blessings,
EA

Susan
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3 posted 2004-06-26 09:56 AM


I enjoyed the ride very much.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Sunshine
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4 posted 2004-06-26 10:06 AM



Wheeeeee....I have a whole week of
Sy'ing to catch up on!!!!

Happy Dance!!!


SEA
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5 posted 2004-06-26 11:23 AM


"I challenge the echoes repeat
The gravity of its receipt
The power of its grace and rhyme
Impressions in the sands of time"

yep...gonna have to echo Janet here...these are the coolest lines....
really enjoyed this

Kahlil
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6 posted 2004-06-26 11:31 AM


Your words echo through the universe and touch us all, Sy Man.  Cool write.  ~K~
icebox
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7 posted 2004-06-26 11:39 AM


A very skillful blend of image word and rhyme.

Thanks!!

Enchantress
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8 posted 2004-06-26 11:46 AM


Excellent write here m'friend.
Seems I just squeezed in just under the wire..
it's almost lunch time...but there's still tea.
~Noontime Hugs, Nancy~

Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that.
Something from the sea, whichever one I'm near.
When I stray too far from beachland, it calls me back

passing shadows
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9 posted 2004-06-26 01:14 PM


wonderfully done Sy
Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2004-06-26 02:23 PM


JM,
You always pick the choice.
WWRS

Earth Angel
How does one top an Angel?

Susan
Thank you sweet.

Sunshine
Welcome home sweety.

SEA
You are a dear.

Kahlil
Thank you for the cool.

icebox
Thank you for the comp.

Nancy
Tea will be fine, hugs.

passing
Thank you for the wonderful.

iliana
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11 posted 2004-06-26 02:55 PM


"I know that echoes will grow gray
It cannot change the changing way
They live within a moments stir
Perhaps the ones that you prefer"

Words so true -- enjoyed immensely!   ..jo

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2004-06-26 03:12 PM


iliana
You are a joy.

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