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Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2004-06-24 04:43 PM


It’s not that our relationship needs to be fixed
or that living without you has become unbearable,
it’s more the uncertainty of the future mixed
with the certainty that I love you terribly, --
it’s the cigarette we shared in Central Park,
and the fountain we embraced by in Lincoln Center,
it’s the poetry I read for you echoing in the dark,
and the frame of your body, long and slender,
it’s the thought that we can’t pin time to the floor,
it’s the cars outside and the sudden shrill of
their breaks that keep me up, wishing you were
next to me, with my arm underneath your pillow.



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SimplyGold
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since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453

1 posted 2004-06-24 06:21 PM


Face it, living without her apparently is unbearable. That is, if this poem is based on experience or perhaps it is just a projection. In any case, the pillow just won't do. Enjoyed the poem (got me thinking)
Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
2 posted 2004-06-24 09:11 PM


Poignant. Especially like the arm beneath the pillow part.

Gotta watch out for that insomnia, it becomes a habit that lasts a lifetime.


Corinne

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
3 posted 2004-06-24 11:55 PM


Master, what a great write.  I especially liked the line about pinning time to the floor -- very original.   .....jo
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
4 posted 2004-06-25 05:07 AM


you have such a way with words and feelings
miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24
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OH
5 posted 2004-06-25 06:07 AM


my favorite line was about pinning time to the floor, too.  Great write!
              miscellanea

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