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To Be Undone
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To Be Undone |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
To be undone. First...I give to you my skin. And dissolved beneath your fingers...I lay bare to the flesh of my desire. There is my blood. As if an ocean that ebbs dry to the pull of constant moons. I bleed arid for a moment in your gaze. And then...there are my bones. They know only of an ache that reaches far from your caress. To be undone...like this - Until the ache is all that's left. And I vanish in your touch. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Soft *sigh* And he does it again... beautiful! ~tier  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Yes, indeed, truly beautiful! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
When I gasped at the end of your poem, I realized that I had not been breathing while I was reading it! It was so sweet, soft and gentle, I suppose my breathing would have interferred with moment!   Linda |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Excellent. You are unique and that is why I cannot resist reading your work. SG |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
and melt.... good grief.... I'm now a puddle |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I know that feeling of it aching so badly it feels that good! Great job on this! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
You are the Master  ! Wow! SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh WOW!!! Excellent Eric!! Something tugs at me, I've no doubt of that. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The soul moans its throaty ecstacy in this write Eric. TD |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
As if an ocean that ebbs dry to the pull of constant moons. I bleed arid for a moment in your gaze. And then...there are my bones. They know only of an ache that reaches far from your caress. To be undone...like this - ========================= Oh I gotta second SEA's good grief and throw in a Have Mercy on the moths........ Awesome write poet sir. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Awesome, Eric -- just one beautiful line after another -- and the ache can be felt! .....jo |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
There is no end to your amazing talent. Yet another wonderful vision of love in all its glory. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Eric, to be undone! such passion in your writing! miscellanea |
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