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exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2004-06-20 09:58 PM

pull your sleave down
to hide your heart
hide
your hair falls in your eyes
but i still see you

it seems,
since i've met you
every word i've said
has been said before
time and time again

i'm not me anymore
a carbon copy
of someone else
someone you could love
but still don't

was it something i said
something i did
i'm not your everything
i'm not your anything
just another photocopy on the ground
imprinted footprints..

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2004-06-20 11:33 PM

Whoa! This hurts...a photocopy on the ground, imprinted footprints.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

2 posted 2004-06-20 11:37 PM

"i'm not your everything
i'm not your anything"

~ Perhaps it should have been written with "he's" instead of "I'm"...

Warm hugs,
EA

Sadelite
Member Elite

since 2003-10-11

Posts 2519

3 posted 2004-06-20 11:48 PM

just the thought of the carbon copy under foot... It doesn't seem right that anyone should have to feel like this. It seems your hair is not in your eyes and you're ready to go forward. Good luck to you.
Sadelite

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-06-21 01:27 AM

This is an excellent expression of emotion. Well written. I agree, however, that it should be written with "he's" as you, my dear, deserve better.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Kevo
Member

since 2004-06-02

Posts 466
Navarro County, Texas, USA

5 posted 2004-06-21 01:36 AM

Yes, I agree. Time to plant your footprint firmly upon his yellow spine. Then flip him over and see what kind of an imprint you can make on his begging throat. Sorry, sometimes I'm not so nice. Your poem was well written, riveting and emotional. You have such a talent in the written word. You obviously have much more to give than currently appreciated. Leave that imprint on the side of his head as you kick him to the curb. There are a lot of people that would treat you the way you should. Don't be a doormat, or a photocopy on the floor. Be what you were born to be. Proud.

Kevin

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2004-06-21 03:32 AM

who could not love the original you? Just be yourself and you'll find someone worthy of you

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