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Soundtrack of our lives

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exhale
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since 06-13-2003
Posts 648
Alberta,Canada


0 posted 06-18-2004 11:32 PM       View Profile for exhale   Email exhale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for exhale

the air around us is so still
you could hear a pin drop
you're looking at me like you have something to say
your eyes speak volumes
so your mouth doesn't have to move
and say the words i know you'll never mean
stopping yourself just short of regret
do we have to speak at all?
wouldn't it be better if we just kept quiet,
so the world can't even hear us breathing.

you're trying to look at me
trying to see who i am
you don't need to know me
there's nothing there worth knowing
an empty shell of a women
longing to be more than she is
trying to be something
but something can never come from nothing.

the soundtrack of our lives,
is playing in the backround
empty words
sung to an empty tune
trying to help us find the meaning
to that which we'll never know
we're not supposed to..

wouldn't it be better it we just kept quiet,
so the world can't even hear us breathing..

do you even know i'm here?..

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Susan
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since 03-27-2004
Posts 5169
walking the surreal


1 posted 06-18-2004 11:35 PM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

You write with such a depth of pain and longing.  Please, you are more than a shell, you have the potential of a goddess in the making, remember that.

Hugs,  Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

Kevo
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since 06-02-2004
Posts 470
Navarro County, Texas, USA


2 posted 06-19-2004 02:46 AM       View Profile for Kevo   Email Kevo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kevo's Home Page   View IP for Kevo

"you're trying to look at me
trying to see who i am
you don't need to know me
there's nothing there worth knowing
an empty shell of a women
longing to be more than she is
trying to be something
but something can never come from nothing."

Your poem was so incredibly moving.  How could one be of nothing that writes so incredibly richly?  Your work is amazing.  You are most intelligent, gifted, and compassionate.  All traits of one cherished and valuable.  

Your poetic friend,

Kevin
passing shadows
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since 08-26-99
Posts 46297
displaced


3 posted 06-19-2004 04:57 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

ouch
jamesjiao
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since 04-12-2000
Posts 270
Backwaters of Avalon


4 posted 07-23-2004 06:23 PM       View Profile for jamesjiao   Email jamesjiao   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit jamesjiao's Home Page   View IP for jamesjiao

Cheer up. I am sure you are more than what you think you are worth.

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.


 
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