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Oblivion (Snow - my version of Oblivion)
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Oblivion (Snow - my version of Oblivion) |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas 
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like me this ranks in the getting on catagory - this is about 40 years old and one of my first writes while sitting in Yokuska, Japan on the deck of the aircraft carrier U.S.S. Hornet wishing I had enough cash in my pocket to go ashore and have an outrageously good time getting plastered. I was 19 at the time watch this Sea Eagle fly around the ship like he had no place to go ... just like me. Had a hell of a time the next day though (payday - a whole $78.00 before taxes for 2 weeks) and wrote something then if I can find it...and of course after that day/night had to wait 2 more weeks for money = luckily we put to sea for a month that week-end. Oblivion On the frost coated window I've drawn a square, representing my house, a dot inside the square, me, sitting by the window. I've drawn a line past the front of the house, the street, and little dots along that line, trees lining the street. Another line is drawn next to the first with a dot at the far end, me,walking down the sidewalk. From the house I watch myself walk, taking slow, careful steps, so as not to step on the cracks, and I’m looking at the trees wondering how they’ll look in a hundred years. Round and round the window, with my hand I’m wiping off the frost, the circle getting smaller, smaller and smaller, until . . . Oblivion! The house, the street, the trees, the sidewalk, Me . . . Oblivion. W. James Beard, Jr. copyright - lost in the '60's [This message has been edited by jwesley (06-13-2004 12:07 AM).] |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ouch!!! Jimmy, hang in there! This was quite an expressive poem; your feelings really came out.  |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Very interesting thought progression. --  SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 I don't know what to say |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Jimmy -- this was a great write -- only 19, huh? Speaking of Japan and aircraft carriers, my mom's sort-of adopted brother worked as a mechanic on carriers in Japan about the same time....his name was George Debold Miller -- you wouldn't by any chance have known him, would you have? |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Jimmy, hope you have been well. i'm impressed at the amount of talent and maturity you owned when you were 19. Sincerely! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Talent??? More like badly hung-over sitting on the flight deck soaking up sunshine wishing I WAS oblivious - - - to the pain I was feeling....LOL You guy's are way to kind...and Iliana, don't know if I remember anyone that long ago...hardly remember my own name anymore. If I did - betcha we had fun 'cause I always had fun when I was in the Navy (sometimes the results of that "fun" were a little painful though....hee hee). jwesley |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was a nice poem, when you look back and remember what we were like at that age, our thoughts, our dreams, perhaps gives us a new perspective, that time heals wounds, even the internal ones. Very much enjoyed...thank you for sharing a quite frankly excellent first poem with us. Take care and Happy Friday |
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