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Sunshine
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0 posted 2004-06-11 09:08 AM



Hide me

I have taken to hiding
in your words,

pulling them over me,
burying my face in their clever,
which smells much like clover;
soaking in sounds of
heart-beating absolution
as you tend my lost senses.

The inking think of you,
more indelible
upon my skin
than blood or bonds…
even when you believe
your own sounds
feel too frail for my ear,
inherently speaking my own fears,

we draw yet one more step closer,

as we grant this inner
haven

and shadows close around this love.


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (06-11-2004 11:33 AM).]

© Copyright 2004 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-06-11 09:20 AM


"I have taken to hiding
in your words,

pulling them over me,
bury my face in their clever,
which smells much like clover;
soaking in sounds of
heart-beating absolution
as you tend my lost senses."

WOW and WOW again!!
This is exquisite and powerful writing Karilea.
The visions and sounds make the senses come alive..
Oooh I love it....keeping it for sure.
~Hugs YOU!~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Marshalzu
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2 posted 2004-06-11 09:21 AM


Wow, this is such an amazing peice of writing, thanks for sharing

Andrew

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3 posted 2004-06-11 09:24 AM


Sunshine, good Morning
I swear, your writing is maticulous and lovely, I believe you are one of the best I have read....amazingly bittersweet, thank you for sharing.  

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4 posted 2004-06-11 12:12 PM




  

Big Hugs Karilea !!

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5 posted 2004-06-11 01:25 PM


oh this is soooo snuggly nice
El_Campeador
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6 posted 2004-06-11 02:06 PM


Excellent poem, Karilea. What a picture you have painted for us!

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

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7 posted 2004-06-11 03:58 PM


The inking think of you,
more indelible
upon my skin
than blood or bonds…

Oh, yes... it is this. *S* Beautiful write!!

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8 posted 2004-06-11 06:35 PM


and this is sooooo going into my library.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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9 posted 2004-06-11 07:11 PM


"The inking think of you,
more indelible
upon my skin
than blood or bonds…
even when you believe
your own sounds
feel too frail for my ear,
inherently speaking my own fears,"

What an exquisite expression of sensitivity....and I feel the truth of it.   ....jo


Titia Geertman
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10 posted 2004-06-11 08:35 PM



This is so beautiful Sunshine, beyond words.

Titia

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Denise
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11 posted 2004-06-11 08:47 PM


Indeed it is. Very beautifully done, Karilea!
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12 posted 2004-06-11 08:51 PM


Now that was a very pretty put together presentation dear lady.
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13 posted 2004-06-12 05:14 PM


Hi Kari, this is perfect. And thanks for the welcome home. I missed you all.
Sandra

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14 posted 2004-06-12 06:45 PM


pleasure to read this fine day


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