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Reflections on Grief - II

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suthern
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0 posted 06-10-2004 11:30 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

Plea from the Departed

Grief is inevitable

You cannot slide
From heaven’s door
To gates of hell
Without acquiring
An unwanted passenger
Not just along for the ride
But anxious to dictate
Each breath you take

Don’t let it destroy
Your ability to experience joy

The memories of what was
And knowing it won’t be again
Give you claim on sorrow
But please don’t let
The keen of pain
Become your theme song
That is not a fitting honor
To the melody that was ours

Whatever you do
Don’t let grief define you

It is not forgetting me
To remember how to laugh
Saying farewell to mourning
May feel like losing me again
But I will never leave you
So let me watch you celebrate
The beauty that was us

Through your love for me
I will live on
If you can just
Let yourself live
© Copyright 2004 suthern - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 06-10-2004 11:45 AM       View Profile for jellybeans   Email jellybeans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jellybeans

I thought I had said all there was to say on grief....exhausted my muse's vocabulary...am glad yours took up the subject, for you voice it eloquently...and with dignity...
I know that grief sometimes screams in anguish, but when it is 'worn' in quiet dignity, thats when it speaks best of all
Janet Marie
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2 posted 06-10-2004 11:47 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

So let me watch you celebrate
The beauty that was us

Through your love for me
I will live on
=======================


my dear...you just painted butterfly wings on the "traces left behind"

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3 posted 06-10-2004 11:49 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

jellybeans: You know that your response has just given this one-track muse more ammo, don't you??? LOL

JM: How utterly lovely. *S*

Thank you both, so very much... It is fitting the two of you should respond first... you know both me and subject so well... Thank you! *S*
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4 posted 06-10-2004 12:54 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

yes..I knew it

a keeper for sure!
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5 posted 06-10-2004 12:58 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

suthern
A beautiful write and a beautiful read.
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6 posted 06-10-2004 12:59 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

An unwanted passenger
Not just along for the ride
But anxious to dictate
Each breath you take

~*~

I have suddenly realized
that grief takes on
a physical form...
and not always necessarily in one's self...

well done, sweetheart.

I may have learned a little lesson or two today...

because of you.
Sudhir Iyer
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7 posted 06-10-2004 03:28 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

what a follow-up...

off to III...

regards
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8 posted 06-10-2004 03:49 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

"But please don’t let
The keen of pain
Become your theme song
That is not a fitting honor
To the melody that was ours"

Amazing, amazing writing!
On to part three.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

iliana
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9 posted 06-10-2004 04:48 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Excellent....jo
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Laura, this is masterful....this trio of poems has to be one of the best works I've seen in this site.

In the past you've shared with me the feeling that your poetry doesn't compare to that of the quality poets here.... Don't be saying that any more, Suthern gal -- you just proved you are one of them.

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11 posted 06-10-2004 07:08 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Ruth

Such wisdom in your words...I wish I had read this back in 1974 when Michelle died.  Thank you for posting it now though...it touches that place in me that needs it still.  
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12 posted 06-10-2004 07:32 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

That IS the most important part, to not let grief overtake our lives to the point where we no longer can experience joy. It's an easy trap to fall into, too, when the bony finger of reality pokes at our chests in the morning, when we awaken and remember why we're sad.

Lovely.


Cor
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13 posted 06-10-2004 09:40 PM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

So very well done.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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14 posted 06-10-2004 10:05 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

Suthern,
  You Naughty Girl!  This one made me cry.
               Sadelite
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15 posted 06-10-2004 11:36 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

*keeper*
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SuthernDear~
This trilogy is the best of you ...
this poetess thanks you for being who you are.
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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17 posted 06-11-2004 03:41 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

PS: I'm glad it didn't disappoint. *S* Thank you so much! *S*

Seymour: Thank you very much, my friend... I'm glad you liked! *S*

Sunshine: It certainly seems to be a separate entity... of the cruel overseer variety. *S* Thank you!!

Sudhir, Enchantress, iliana: Thank you, my friends... it means a lot to me that you're reading the series. *S*

Ratleader: Thank you, oh king of cut and paste! LOL Seriously... I'm grateful. *S* I know you don't say those words lightly... I can't tell you what they mean to me. *S*

Martie: You couldn't have handed me a more lasting bouquet than that it touched a place that needed it... thank you so much!

Corinne: It's something I believe... even as I know how difficult it is to allow ourselves joy again... I hope that when my time comes I'm mourned... but even more, I hope I'm remembered with smiles. *S* Thank you so much!!

Larry: Thank you very much! *S*

Sadelite: That wasn't my intention, my friend. *S* But it moves me greatly that you found such meaning in my words. *S* Thank you!!

Midnitesun: Thank you so much! *S*

Marge: And I thank you for being my friend... it helps me be whatever it is I am. *S* Thank you!!!!


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18 posted 06-29-2004 01:10 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Three new arrivals means the first three get a bump!

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19 posted 06-29-2004 01:30 PM       View Profile for SimplyGold   Email SimplyGold   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SimplyGold

suthern,

Cannot responsd for I am only part way to reading 3 and 4 and perhaps more? I will hold my comments till I can spend more time thinking about each segment. They deserve the time for contemplation.

Thank you
SG
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20 posted 07-01-2004 05:07 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Ratleader: Thank you, my friend... I couldn't ask for more than that you like them. *S*

Simply Gold: That's a tremendous compliment... and I thank you so very much!!
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21 posted 08-27-2004 04:52 PM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

I think moving beyond the point where grief is what defines you may even be harder then the grieving itself...
Love this.

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
                  Joyce kilmer

 
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