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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2004-06-10 04:54 PM


It’s the rainy days
When puddles gather on black
And I in stare at my reflection
Can see through myself and out again
Into the empty that is left
……………………………..
Crazed
The glazed vase now stands bare
Stems long since devoid of greenery or bloom
Become the abstract
Straighter lines to compliment
The checks and haze of blue
Surrounding glass

The skyline became palms and waves then
And I drank warm air into lungs
Too long used to winter
While exposing bared arms to breezes
And more of myself to you than I should

You smiled
I remember that  
And I remember how the feel of your cheek
Against my shoulder left me restless
To walk the sand and listen to the waves
Sweep sand against sand
Drowning steps and sounds

And it’s the rainy days now
With the hiss of falling drops that remind me
Of sea tides and of you

Tomorrow I will buy flowers
Tropical I think
And fill the vase with them

When the clouds have gone
And the puddles dried
So they don’t fall through the holes
Inside…


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Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2004-06-10 05:00 PM


Empty?

Really?

Not when you can write like this and certainly not from what I remember..

Empty is a perspective..and maybe there should be some rule that we not judge it for ourselves.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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Canada eh.
2 posted 2004-06-10 05:54 PM


"And it’s the rainy days now
With the hiss of falling drops that remind me
Of sea tides and of you

Tomorrow I will buy flowers
Tropical I think
And fill the vase with them

When the clouds have gone
And the puddles dried
So they don’t fall through the holes
Inside…"

Beautiful, melancholy...
it's raining here today..too.
Thank you for this Captain.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2004-06-10 06:12 PM


tomorrow I think I will buy some flowers, too...

M

Susan
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walking the surreal
4 posted 2004-06-10 07:40 PM


Wow.  This one really spoke to me.  Excellent.

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2004-06-10 08:23 PM


The skyline became palms and waves then
And I drank warm air into lungs
Too long used to winter
While exposing bared arms to breezes
And more of myself to you than I should

You smiled
I remember that  
And I remember how the feel of your cheek
Against my shoulder left me restless
To walk the sand and listen to the waves
Sweep sand against sand
Drowning steps and sounds

And it’s the rainy days now
With the hiss of falling drops that remind me
Of sea tides and of you

==============================


good grief....
I just flew head on into a mirror..........
I'll get the Windex...
*sigh*

When your own emptiness is all thats getting through
There comes a point when youre not sure why youre still talking
I passed that point long ago

Nightshade
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just out of reach
6 posted 2004-06-10 08:27 PM


Cpat. - this is just wonderful. I am tucking it away in my library to read again and again. hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

Martie
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7 posted 2004-06-10 10:17 PM


Ron

Today, it's raining inside.  

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
8 posted 2004-06-11 04:54 AM


Crazed
The glazed vase now stands bare
Stems long since devoid of greenery or bloom
Become the abstract
Straighter lines to compliment
The checks and haze of blue
Surrounding glass

Oh my!  Oh Cpat, you write the craze and haze so brilliantly!

Gawd, you look good in blue!!!


LeeJ
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9 posted 2004-06-11 07:40 AM





Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
10 posted 2004-06-11 08:40 AM



Another one
to keep...

only because I've been listening
to sea songs.

scorpio
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since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178
right...there
11 posted 2004-06-11 08:48 AM


Flowers will brighten the darkest of days and lift the heaviest of cares...

believe in what your heart feels...

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