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Gravel Gray: Dedicated to my sister, iliana (Jo)

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Sadelite
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0 posted 06-09-2004 12:21 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sadelite

I drive the dusty gray
past leaning fence post, uncut hay;
Birdsun layers and a sunning-greet
send their iridescent call
to unsweater self-hate and loss's grief.

   Crickets chirp "No more pity--
   Take a look at what IS pretty!
   Immerse yourself in nature bath.

   Forget your mind and past mistakes.
   Float them through the air;
   It doesn't matter, brain right or left
   Or, if it's been out to lunch somewhere."

Convolutions, only gray matter,
Simple dust on gray gravel


        ~Sadelite~

(P.s) Jo, spelling error free; any misspellings are purposeful.  Much appreciated my big sis through the tough ones...)  Whoops!  I just found a typo-birdsun layers was originally intended as birdsung, but it's not a bad mistake.  I'll keep it.)
  

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (06-10-2004 11:40 AM).]

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1 posted 06-09-2004 12:22 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Imagery, sensations, even the gravel dust
sifted in on this one, and settled all
around me.
Sadelite
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2 posted 06-09-2004 12:25 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

Sunshine,
  If you come to Ohio, we'll have to make that happen for real...  Thanks, oh Wise One!
I love hearing from you.  Have a good day.
LeeJ
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3 posted 06-09-2004 01:04 PM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

It doesn't matter, brain right or left
   Or, if it's been out to lunch somewhere."

Sincerely, this gave my humor a tickle...especially with the play on brain right or left...extremely liked....as certain parts of the brain harbor special occupations...(smile)

This was a very unique read, enjoyed!
Thank you for writing and sharing.
Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 06-09-2004 01:15 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

This is a special write... much enjoyed... thanks...

regards
sudhir
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5 posted 06-09-2004 02:15 PM       View Profile for Ericc   Email Ericc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ericc

Wow....this is such a creative work.
Great job!

Eric
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6 posted 06-09-2004 02:48 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Sadie, 'lil sis, I will always cherish this.  Crickets, huh?  Well, glad you heard them.  Keep listening, Okay?  Love ya, ....jo    PS:  Great right! (misspelling intentional!)
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7 posted 06-09-2004 02:51 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

Well, I thouuuuught there weren't any.  I threw this up so quickly and am multi-tasking.
  Yep, I did make a couple of typo's.  Just fixed them. Now I think it's the way I intended except birdsun, but that's ok.

    Slad you liked and will treasure.
I treasure you!   Slad-hm.  New word.  What a day!
        

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a beautiful gifting
Susan
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9 posted 06-09-2004 03:13 PM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

I like this, and all it has to say.  Enjoyed --

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

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10 posted 06-09-2004 06:25 PM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Enjoyed this Sadie girl. Well done. Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

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11 posted 06-09-2004 10:00 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

It is easy to feel the love and admiration
of one for the other....very nicely written
words of love.  and yes,  we can skip stones
any day you like...
Sadelite
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12 posted 06-09-2004 10:06 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

Thanks to Everyone--you all are so kind.  I luv ya!
   and Magnus, How about tomorrow?  Begin around 7:00 a.m. so we get a full day in?
(I really enjoyed your poem!!!)
         ~Sadelite
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13 posted 06-10-2004 10:57 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

chuckling at this one, as I drive on  dust/gravel roads every day on my way to the farm, and am right-brain lopsided LOL
Sadelite
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14 posted 06-10-2004 11:39 AM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

midnitesun,
  sounds like we have much in common... smile
sent...
            ~Sadelite~
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15 posted 06-10-2004 01:22 PM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

Much enjoyed Sadie
This is what it's really all about.
TD
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16 posted 06-10-2004 01:34 PM       View Profile for Sadelite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sadelite

Thanks, TD;
   It might be what it's all about, but sometimes it's easy and sometimes it's not.
To get a consistent focus-that's what's it's about... Still working on that one... Thanks for your comments.  I always enjoy your visit.
              Sadie  
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18 posted 07-06-2004 10:13 AM       View Profile for C?   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for C?

I'm surprised I didn't respond to this one when I first saw this.  This is you at yer best, fer sure. This is why I relate to your style and topics so well.  Awe Yea, King of the Road.
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19 posted 07-06-2004 11:15 AM       View Profile for jellybeans   Email jellybeans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jellybeans

beautiful, gift and write....enjoyed!
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20 posted 11-11-2007 12:55 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
 
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