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Sadelite
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0 posted 2004-06-09 12:21 PM


I drive the dusty gray
past leaning fence post, uncut hay;
Birdsun layers and a sunning-greet
send their iridescent call
to unsweater self-hate and loss's grief.

   Crickets chirp "No more pity--
   Take a look at what IS pretty!
   Immerse yourself in nature bath.

   Forget your mind and past mistakes.
   Float them through the air;
   It doesn't matter, brain right or left
   Or, if it's been out to lunch somewhere."

Convolutions, only gray matter,
Simple dust on gray gravel


        ~Sadelite~

(P.s) Jo, spelling error free; any misspellings are purposeful.  Much appreciated my big sis through the tough ones...)  Whoops!  I just found a typo-birdsun layers was originally intended as birdsung, but it's not a bad mistake.  I'll keep it.)
  

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (06-10-2004 11:40 AM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-06-09 12:22 PM



Imagery, sensations, even the gravel dust
sifted in on this one, and settled all
around me.

Sadelite
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2 posted 2004-06-09 12:25 PM


Sunshine,
  If you come to Ohio, we'll have to make that happen for real...  Thanks, oh Wise One!
I love hearing from you.  Have a good day.

LeeJ
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3 posted 2004-06-09 01:04 PM


It doesn't matter, brain right or left
   Or, if it's been out to lunch somewhere."

Sincerely, this gave my humor a tickle...especially with the play on brain right or left...extremely liked....as certain parts of the brain harbor special occupations...(smile)

This was a very unique read, enjoyed!
Thank you for writing and sharing.

Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 2004-06-09 01:15 PM


This is a special write... much enjoyed... thanks...

regards
sudhir

Ericc
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5 posted 2004-06-09 02:15 PM


Wow....this is such a creative work.
Great job!

Eric

iliana
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6 posted 2004-06-09 02:48 PM


Sadie, 'lil sis, I will always cherish this.  Crickets, huh?  Well, glad you heard them.  Keep listening, Okay?  Love ya, ....jo    PS:  Great right! (misspelling intentional!)
Sadelite
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7 posted 2004-06-09 02:51 PM


Well, I thouuuuught there weren't any.  I threw this up so quickly and am multi-tasking.
  Yep, I did make a couple of typo's.  Just fixed them. Now I think it's the way I intended except birdsun, but that's ok.

    Slad you liked and will treasure.
I treasure you!   Slad-hm.  New word.  What a day!
        

[This message has been edited by Sadelite (06-09-2004 03:40 PM).]

passing shadows
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8 posted 2004-06-09 02:52 PM


a beautiful gifting
Susan
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9 posted 2004-06-09 03:13 PM


I like this, and all it has to say.  Enjoyed --

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

Nightshade
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10 posted 2004-06-09 06:25 PM


Enjoyed this Sadie girl. Well done. Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

Magnus
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11 posted 2004-06-09 10:00 PM


It is easy to feel the love and admiration
of one for the other....very nicely written
words of love.  and yes,  we can skip stones
any day you like...

Sadelite
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12 posted 2004-06-09 10:06 PM


Thanks to Everyone--you all are so kind.  I luv ya!
   and Magnus, How about tomorrow?  Begin around 7:00 a.m. so we get a full day in?
(I really enjoyed your poem!!!)
         ~Sadelite

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13 posted 2004-06-10 10:57 AM


chuckling at this one, as I drive on  dust/gravel roads every day on my way to the farm, and am right-brain lopsided LOL
Sadelite
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14 posted 2004-06-10 11:39 AM


midnitesun,
  sounds like we have much in common... smile
sent...
            ~Sadelite~

ThisDiamond
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15 posted 2004-06-10 01:22 PM


Much enjoyed Sadie
This is what it's really all about.
TD

Sadelite
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16 posted 2004-06-10 01:34 PM


Thanks, TD;
   It might be what it's all about, but sometimes it's easy and sometimes it's not.
To get a consistent focus-that's what's it's about... Still working on that one... Thanks for your comments.  I always enjoy your visit.
              Sadie  

passing shadows
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17 posted 2004-07-04 12:50 PM



C?
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18 posted 2004-07-06 10:13 AM


I'm surprised I didn't respond to this one when I first saw this.  This is you at yer best, fer sure. This is why I relate to your style and topics so well.  Awe Yea, King of the Road.
jellybeans
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19 posted 2004-07-06 11:15 AM


beautiful, gift and write....enjoyed!
Artic Wind
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20 posted 2007-11-11 12:55 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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