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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2004-06-09 03:39 AM


At the window I stand looking out at the sun
and how it encroaches on imbedded goodness
to highlight the pain and the longing for love
there to be seen, to be known, understood.  

The edges begin to crinkle and curl
like passion as it begins to take hold
and I thought to shout out, to warn the sky,
of impending disaster but then I said, “No!”

The sun too clever won’t ever let go
and the sky so blue, so needy, unloved,
will embrace and believe in connectedness
until the sun moves to discover the new.

Now at the window I look at the moon
and I think of the semblance of love,
a chilly embrace, a surface smile,
and I try to believe in warmth.

It happens that way when love’s for a day
and the sun plays happy with sky
but the moon unstable can be re-aligned
and a mind can pretend anything.

I look at the moon with sadness, regret,
but I know how the sun can hurt
so I turn away, look the other way,
and hope that the sky doesn’t burn!

Helen / 9 June 2004


© Copyright 2004 Helen - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-06-09 05:17 AM


what a beautifully sad write
Honeybunch
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2 posted 2004-06-09 06:38 AM


Thanks for the read, passing shadows.  
iliana
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3 posted 2004-06-09 11:11 PM


On one level, this poem seems like a lament for the love of a person; but on another level, it seems much, much deeper.  I'm going to take a second look and see what I end up with.  Beautiful writing in any case.     .....jo
Honeybunch
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4 posted 2004-06-10 12:58 PM


Hi, jo - You're right on that one level and the deeper bit perhaps in the soul, the timeless soul.  Thank you for the read.
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5 posted 2004-06-10 01:34 AM


Helen~
This is so very beautifully done~
Such a pleasure to plunder the layers~

'The sun too clever won’t ever let go
and the sky so blue, so needy, unloved,
will embrace and believe in connectedness
until the sun moves to discover the new.'


Oh my ... the thoughts running through my head after this read~
Thank you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Honeybunch
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6 posted 2004-06-10 04:02 AM


Thank you, Marge, for such a lovely comment.
One day we'll get to the start of it all and then I wonder what we'll think.

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