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Distant Star
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
Distant Star I am undeserving of life's treasures Whether it be a smile or a joyful cry, A summer breeze or the smell after the rain; Not worthy of a kiss from an Angel Or to hear the laughter of a child; My heart does not deserve to love without lust Or the satisfaction of knowing the difference. I do deserve twice fold the tears and pain I have caused So I sadly await the sentence of past lovers and death. But where is the compassion of Cupid's arrows? Arrows that seem to enjoy the taste of my blood, Nicking and cutting the word "Fear" into my skin As I dodge and avoid commitment, Sprinting to the other side of the rainbow, Stopping only for a second to smell the fragrance of what could have been--- And she smelled of sweet honey and slightly of bubblegum and roses, And I found in her an appreciation of innocence; But she pitied my selfishness And turned her back to face the glory of the sun Absorbing its warmth... And her eyes appeared as two flaming moons Shining a light on my consciousness, Making my soul ashamed of its nakedness--- A baring of my sins and confessions Has me transforming in the shadows And my eyes appeared as two black moons Piercing, like the fearless eagle spotting prey Taking flight into the awaiting skies Soaring...then fading... A speck or a sparkling gem in the Heavens, A star only through my eyes. Marcel |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"And her eyes appeared as two flaming moons Shining a light on my consciousness," Dang, what cool imagery Marcel. This is a thoroughly enjoyable read |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So many thoughts caught fire as I read this... Sometimes distance is a relative term... Authentic and genuine excellence TD |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marcel~ Sometimes I read you and cry ... this is one of those times~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I have an affinity for stars mayself...bumping this back to the top. Good write. TD |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good write great imagery |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Maybe, I'm interpreting this incorrectly, but it sounds like you've met your match! Let me know if I misunderstood. At any rate, I really enjoyed reading this. ........jo |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
stars are never as distant as we believe  just stop being afraid of getting burned. great imagery, enjoyed this  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
NIce...James |
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