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James_A_Fraser
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0 posted 2004-06-03 07:06 PM


While You Turn To Sleep

Your hair spills careless over the pillow,
just a shimmer, liquid lace flowing
silent in the curtained moonlight.
One lock has strayed across your cheek;
it turns gently with each breath,
while your face lightens, eyes quiet now,
closing slowly as you drift into sleep.
The strain of day is softening as I watch
each care drift off into the shadows,
leave you free to dream until the morning.

I love you even more in these quiet times,
a joy to watch you turn your daytime
into night, by the simple magic of sleep.
I cannot touch, moved beyond moving
by the curves of you, made lovelier
by these few light turns of cloth that
frame your warmth, whisper to me
of skin so near, so soft beneath them.

Your trembling breath tells me that
you’re asleep now, it’s time for me
to sleep as well; or it could be I’m
asleep already, dreaming you again
so many miles and hills away,
and a scene I’ll never see.

[This message has been edited by James_A_Fraser (06-03-2004 09:13 PM).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2004-06-03 07:08 PM


Jamie

Tenderly and lovingly written, like a breath on a hair.  

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2 posted 2004-06-03 09:04 PM


Jaime~
So very, very softly beautiful~
A favorite ... yes~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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jwesley
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3 posted 2004-06-03 10:22 PM


Very well written my friend...much enjoyed the feeling here...

jwesley

Kahlil
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4 posted 2004-06-04 01:44 AM


This is so tender and loving; so revealing.  The ending leaves me dreaming...and wondering.   ~K~
iliana
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5 posted 2004-06-04 03:10 AM


You're just an ole romantic, aren't ya?  Great write.
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6 posted 2004-06-04 05:14 AM


oh...how precious!
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7 posted 2004-06-04 11:23 AM


This is so gentle and loving... and becomes even more so when you leave us questioning whether you're seeing with your eyes or your heart. *S* Softly stunning, beautiful work!
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