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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2004-06-02 08:55 AM



some hello there sky
blue skinned woman
with exposed allure

clouds have fallen away
from her bosom moon
she don't seem to mind anymore

says night likes to show her off
in public, she kinda digs it too
knowing what it does to the tides

she says their ends are cold,
the mountains
when she leans over them

to serve some milky ways
or black holes
or galaxies of dreams

she talks to the wind
about her love life
or lack of sometimes

it is just sex with night anymore
and she is lonely in the mornings
when he stays gone all day

wind whispers make moon ends then
dark corner susurration
she blushes turqoise

and adjusts her clouds to proper
but the wind moves them aside
and she dances with his eyes


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-06-02 08:57 AM



Gotta love moon watchers
and white waters...

Enchantress
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2 posted 2004-06-02 08:59 AM


My oh my....and she is a beauty right now.
Love it Dark.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

LeeJ
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3 posted 2004-06-02 09:11 AM


oh boy, what bittersweet truth your weave
Kahlil
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4 posted 2004-06-02 09:18 AM


oh, this is fabulously seductive!!  
I must keep it!  ~K~

Kahlil
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5 posted 2004-06-02 09:21 AM


...also I love the title.

Great picture, too!
~K~

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6 posted 2004-06-02 09:41 AM


Nice..... a lot of class in a little poem.

A class called How To Write, that is! Good stuff!

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Martie
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7 posted 2004-06-02 09:50 AM


DS

She was beautiful last night looking in my bedroom window.  As usual you airbrush your words and make art.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
8 posted 2004-06-02 09:53 AM


it's my moon in June

remembering~

MM

Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2004-06-02 10:26 AM


airbrush indeed....one of your best m'friend.  Well done Dark.
dingusjr
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10 posted 2004-06-02 10:31 AM


REALLY good stuff.
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11 posted 2004-06-02 07:07 PM


DarkStranger~

THIS IS EXCELLENT WRITING~

'she talks to the wind
about her love life
or lack of sometimes

it is just sex with night anymore
and she is lonely in the mornings
when he stays gone all day

wind whispers make moon ends then
dark corner susurration
she blushes turqoise

and adjusts her clouds to proper
but the wind moves them aside
and she dances with his eyes'


Solid gold are these thoughts~


*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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iliana
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12 posted 2004-06-02 07:17 PM


Awesome writing!  
1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
13 posted 2004-06-02 07:28 PM


ah the magnet moon
the mistress
of all things

Janet Marie
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14 posted 2004-06-02 07:39 PM


what you do with imagery and personification is as impressive as the moon.

We believe the past could be undone...but time always reveals ...
the lonely light of morning...the wound that would not heal.

Sarah Mc.

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