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Corinne
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0 posted 2004-06-01 08:06 PM



Down Sun River

It was to be a golden summer,
spent within strong arms of thick logs;
air scrubbed by piney spires,
evenings cooled by a burn’s breeze.
Two families sharing time.

5.a.m. saw us packing sandwiches for fishing trips –
mostly it was the men and kids, although once,
Trish and I went: lines in water,
feet hanging over dock’s end,
minds on conversation, not fish.
We didn’t catch a thing;
but I took this photo of her hand holding a daisy,
rocks and blue ripples in the background.

The cabin had sixty wooded acres to explore
and for children to pretend monsters hid in the pines,
slipping from view just as shadowy movement catches the eye.

Evenings saw us drinking and playing cards
or listening to music or solving the world’s problems,
while the kids played hide-and-go-seek in the loft
or watched videos; falling asleep where they lay.

On the day of our departure,
we stood by our respective cars
reluctant for summer to end.

On impulse,
Trish’s husband, Steve, ran behind the barn
and dragged out the canoe;
said he was going for one last run.


© Copyright 2004 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2004-06-01 08:28 PM


Corinne

This brings back some wonderful memories to me. Thank you!  Summer is almost here again...and there are many rivers...yes?  

iliana
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2 posted 2004-06-01 10:37 PM


We never want summer to end, do we?!  Lovely penning, Corinne!     .....jo
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3 posted 2004-06-02 12:02 PM


Oh I love summer.. and I love reading you Corinne.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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4 posted 2004-06-02 12:54 PM


"It was to be a golden summer,
spent within strong arms of thick logs;
air scrubbed by piney spires,
evenings cooled by a burn’s breeze."

Love this part Corrine.  Summer stories are the best...  


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5 posted 2004-06-02 02:02 AM


how rich in memory
Sunshine
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6 posted 2004-06-02 02:06 PM


Now, these are the free-est
of verses...
and braided memories...
this was an easy "fall into"
kind of poem, Corinne...

and I hope you are more again, soon.

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7 posted 2004-06-02 07:02 PM


Corinne~

'We didn’t catch a thing;
but I took this photo of her hand holding a daisy,
rocks and blue ripples in the background.'


Oh my dear poetess ... you 'caught' a moment-in-time~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~


~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Corinne
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8 posted 2004-06-02 08:46 PM


Martie, Jo, Maree, Duncan, Passing Shadows, Sunshin ( ) and Marge  --

thank you for your lovely comments!


Corinne

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