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Reflections on Grief - III

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suthern
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0 posted 06-10-2004 03:22 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for suthern

Dealer's Choice

Grief is unpredictable

Shattering families
It turns lovers into strangers
Who’ve nothing in common
But the bleakness it wraps them in

It can also forge
Unsought, unbreakable bonds
Between those who know its searing
And seek to survive its fires

It steals breath from lungs
And disconnects a beating heart
Before disappearing
Leaving welcome numb
Only to wage a sneak attack
That drains color from a day

With screech and screams
It is writhing prima donna
Demanding center stage
Portraying the agonies of the damned

Then walks in dignified silence
Unobtrusive to all
But discerning eyes

Preparation for its arrival
Does not lessen its capriciousness
There’s no way to predict
What hand might be yours

Its only consistency
Is its reluctance to leave

© Copyright 2004 suthern - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 06-10-2004 03:29 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

It is writhing prima donna
........

I know those words

only you write them so much better...

more to come, hopefully?

regards
sudhir
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2 posted 06-10-2004 03:51 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

"With screech and screams
It is writhing prima donna
Demanding center stage
Portraying the agonies of the damned

Then walks in dignified silence
Unobtrusive to all
But discerning eyes"

You write with such truth and wisdom.
I am speechess....
Well done!
Hugs~
jellybeans
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3 posted 06-10-2004 04:47 PM       View Profile for jellybeans   Email jellybeans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jellybeans

again...was gonna quote my fav verse, but would quote the whole thing....this series is so powerful, so well written...and the only one other thing that grief posseses is the ability to lighten itself by sharing...and you have lightened mine
iliana
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4 posted 06-10-2004 04:50 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

"It can also forge
Unsought, unbreakable bonds
Between those who know its searing
And seek to survive its fires"

I know this to be true.  Every line -- very wise.   ......jo
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5 posted 06-10-2004 06:23 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

It steals breath from lungs
And disconnects a beating heart
Before disappearing
Leaving welcome numb
Only to wage a sneak attack
That drains color from a day

how I feel...today...

I have felt the many disguises grief takes on...

I enjoyed your series  from the onset.

M
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6 posted 06-10-2004 06:58 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Laura, this is masterful....this trio of poems has to be one of the best works I've seen in this site.

In the past you've shared with me the feeling that your poetry doesn't compare to that of the quality poets here.... Don't be saying that any more, Suthern gal -- you just proved you are one of them.

I was riveted to these poems from the first line to the last, simply couldn't pause to reply to one before going on to the next. Well done!

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7 posted 06-10-2004 07:09 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Again, thank you!  
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8 posted 06-10-2004 07:13 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

You nailed it m'friend, simply nailed it.  I wish I could say I don't know this but I do, and it stings again with your words here, for one thing is certain the predictability of knowing its persistance.  

I do believe in all I have read of yours this is about the most excellent work you have done in my opinion.
Corinne
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9 posted 06-10-2004 07:34 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Southern,

one can certainly tell from these writings that you have experienced grief first hand.

Wishing you peace, friend.


Corinne
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10 posted 06-10-2004 08:17 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

It can also forge
Unsought, unbreakable bonds
Between those who know its searing
And seek to survive its fires

It steals breath from lungs
And disconnects a beating heart
Before disappearing
Leaving welcome numb
Only to wage a sneak attack
That drains color from a day

With screech and screams
It is writhing prima donna
Demanding center stage
Portraying the agonies of the damned

Then walks in dignified silence
Unobtrusive to all
But discerning eyes

Preparation for its arrival
Does not lessen its capriciousness

=======================================
I have to ditto that above accolades..this series is indeed among your best work...powerful expression with a grasp of vocabulary that speaks profoundly...and a depth of emotion that defines all thats been lost and denied.

The irony is in knowing that to write from this depth, one has known this sorrow far too often.  You speak for those that may not have the expression of gifted pen.
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11 posted 06-10-2004 09:32 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

OhSweetestSuthernGal~

'Its only consistency
Is its reluctance to leave'

You are such a masterful poetess, the feelings wrap me in their certainty~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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12 posted 06-10-2004 09:37 PM       View Profile for Larry C   Email Larry C   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Larry C's Home Page   View IP for Larry C

Sweet lady,
I must remind you how happy I am that you are here. You know more than I would wish for you and share more than I could ask. Thank you.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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13 posted 06-10-2004 11:35 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

dang
double dang
triple dang
you've outworded grief, m'friend
I am keeping this series
suthern
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14 posted 06-11-2004 03:45 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I cannot tell you how much your responses mean to me... I can only say I cherish each and every one. From the bottom of my heart, I thank you... I'm stunned and humbled that so many of you have taken the time to read and respond to all 3 parts... I'm grateful for you... collectively and individually. *S* THANK YOU!!!
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15 posted 06-29-2004 01:10 PM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

Three new arrivals means the first three get a bump!

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16 posted 06-29-2004 01:35 PM       View Profile for SimplyGold   Email SimplyGold   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SimplyGold

"Its only consistency
Is its reluctance to leave"

This is where our strength must endure.

I am weeping inside
For here is where
  a momentary touch
can pave the way towards healing


SG
suthern
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17 posted 07-01-2004 05:08 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Ratleader: You are a gift, my friend... I thank you so much!!

Simply Gold: That's absolutely lovely... Thank you so very much!!!
GG
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18 posted 08-27-2004 04:56 PM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

Boy do I know this one.
I lost friends (that needed to be lost, sadly, anyway) from grieving...
but I gained the closest and truest friends from it, also.
It's strange how it completely alters your perspectives in life...

I've got these three in my library now...

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
                  Joyce kilmer

GG
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19 posted 08-27-2004 05:26 PM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

oops! Now the three are in my library

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
                  Joyce kilmer

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20 posted 08-27-2004 09:31 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Ruth, I read this back in June...
but it was much too...true...

and I found myself unable to say
what I wanted to say...

and still do.

You, my dear, have a gift.
peppermint35
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21 posted 10-23-2004 08:39 AM       View Profile for peppermint35   Email peppermint35   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for peppermint35

It steals breath from lungs
And disconnects a beating heart
Before disappearing
Leaving welcome numb
Only to wage a sneak attack
That drains color from a day

With screech and screams
It is writhing prima donna
Demanding center stage
Portraying the agonies of the damned

I surely know this feeling.. but you wrote it with words...

Pepper
"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

 
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