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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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I'll be easy conversation when anyone will do... It's ok that I'm past listening when I imagine your words to be a song that someone else sang I can blink through this...sitting on my hands tearing everything I see gives me away you dont know I smile in the direction of your eyes and see you as someone else You're a child and I'm a woman I see that now. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
you dont know I smile in the direction of your eyes and see you as someone else You're a child and I'm a woman I see that now Yes. Excellent. I have been here.  SusanThe whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gemma this feels a little sad but not really, if that makes sense made me think...good write |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow! Eric |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Sounds like a somewhat painful discovery, but a much needed one that brought ease. Trying to pretend is always painful... Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
that I'm past listening when I imagine your words to be a song that someone else sang I can blink through this...sitting on my hands ================================== oh damn girlie........ damn...damn...damn... *** *** *** We believe the past could be undone...but time always reveals ... |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
when I imagine your words to be a song that someone else sang jesus i loved that line. |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
you tell him honey !!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My dear Gem Drop, sounds like you are a woman who would, indeed, be better off with a boy who is all grown up!  Wisdom isn't always easy to come by, is it, my friend... Loving hugs, Linda |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
very well written, it gave me pause and made me sit back a think about it for a moment. I enjoy poems that pull that kind of response from me. Beautifully done. ~Live and Laugh~ The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Well done! (and said)"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ohhhhhh Damn indeed Gemma, this is just perfect. you dont know I smile in the direction of your eyes and see you as someone else You're a child and I'm a woman yup, perfect! Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"I can blink through this...sitting on my hands" What a great, great line....wish I'd thought of that one! Enjoyed you poem, gemma! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Here for another read and this time I'm keeping it... oh and, you're a beautiful woman Gem  Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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