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MovesInSilence
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since 2004-03-21
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0 posted 2004-05-30 10:29 AM


She came to me in the night
Her needs wanting to be met
Longing to be met
I was the only one to fulfil them.

I couldn't help but admire her curves
the way the light plays off them
dancing so delicately down the sides
highlighting her best features

I'm a slave to her needs
I can't escape the control
I tell myself I shouldn't
but I am compelled to do it

I pause to for her last instruction

"I AM YOUR WEB MISSTRESS YOU MUST"



So i clicked ...

Please note the button does nothing

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Susan
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walking the surreal
1 posted 2004-05-30 12:34 PM


Tee Hee -- Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2004-05-30 12:40 PM


that's pretty cool!
Dark Angel
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3 posted 2004-05-30 05:17 PM


Heheheh Enjoyed this very much, thanks for the chuckle

Maree.

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

GlisteningRain
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The clouds
4 posted 2004-05-30 05:33 PM


If you're new to poetry...then damn. That was some unique uh....I wanted to curse but realized I couldn't. It was really good.

- B

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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
5 posted 2004-05-30 08:18 PM


hey
buddy,
is
good
stuff..
yaknow.

LOVED it!!

MovesInSilence
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since 2004-03-21
Posts 111
Perth, Australia
6 posted 2004-05-31 10:12 PM


Thank you for all replying to my poem

and yes i'm still new. This is only my 4th poem so i'm a lil green still.

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