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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2004-05-29 03:29 AM



I'd love to dance with you real slow
drifting in a dawn rose red
holding you
chest to chest
swaying near the pond
of beg
churling mine
beneath the bend
of curling there
just so...

careful cuddle all of me
loving just beneath your breath
I beg
a
suckling of neck
I am
existant in the must
of this
fitting
just between
the breasts
as if
it's perfect pitch

a test--

a beg of passing grade?


I'd love to dance
with you real slow
watching how your muscles move
capturing
this fingering
and the way
I love you smooth
commas
rapturing your smile...

careful loving all of me
forgive me darling if I blink
hiding all the intricate
of the beasts of shy within

in this perfect fit I tend

to blush

as I just look away...



[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (05-29-2004 07:48 AM).]

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MGROVES
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1 posted 2004-05-29 03:33 AM


wow, this is beautiful


passing shadows
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2 posted 2004-05-29 03:38 AM


wow! I like this on you! It looks great!
vlraynes
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3 posted 2004-05-29 03:39 AM



"I'd love to dance
with you real slow
watching how your muscles move
capturing
this fingering
and the way
I love you smooth
commas
capturing your smile...

careful loving all of me
forgive me darling if I blink
hiding all the intricate
of the beasts of shy within

in this perfect fit I tend

to blush

as I just look away..."



Karen?...

I absolutely LOVE this...
and, as always, you bring it to life...

I didn't just 'read'...
I 'saw'... and I smiled...

Love you, lady...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

iliana
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4 posted 2004-05-29 04:00 AM


Once again, you've done it!  The poem is outstanding!   ....jo
ethome
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5 posted 2004-05-29 04:01 AM


Commas capturing your smile....This is really sensuous stuff Celeste!


I thoroughly enjoyed the read..

Eric

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

muted
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6 posted 2004-05-29 04:16 AM


heart pounding here
my goodness,
nodding yes..this IS nice

Dark Angel
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7 posted 2004-05-29 04:30 AM


deep breath in.....smile, this is simply beautiful Karen.



Maree.

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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The clouds
8 posted 2004-05-29 04:34 AM


LIke a Goddess
Kaoru
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9 posted 2004-05-29 05:14 AM


You know, it just..makes sense.
brian sites
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10 posted 2004-05-29 08:40 AM


the pause for breath
in our
long
sentences

love this
Immelle

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11 posted 2004-05-29 09:18 AM


"careful loving all of me
forgive me darling if I blink
hiding all the intricate
of the beasts of shy within

in this perfect fit I tend

to blush

as I just look away..."

Lovely this...
as it danced
its way
down
the page.

Beautiful Karen...love it!
Hugs pretty lady~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

Duncan
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12 posted 2004-05-29 12:47 PM


"I'd love to dance
with you real slow
watching how your muscles move
capturing
this fingering
and the way
I love you smooth
commas
rapturing your smile...

careful loving all of me
forgive me darling if I blink
hiding all the intricate
of the beasts of shy within

in this perfect fit I tend

to blush

as I just look away..."


Love what you do with punctuation K...  


Susan
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13 posted 2004-05-29 01:40 PM


Mmmm . . . very sensuous.

Susan

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14 posted 2004-05-29 02:23 PM


I'd love to dance
with you real slow
watching how your muscles move
capturing
this fingering
and the way
I love you smooth
commas
rapturing your smile...

careful loving all of me
forgive me darling if I blink
hiding all the intricate
of the beasts of shy within

in this perfect fit I tend

to blush

as I just look away...



Oh, my Karen....OH  MY!!!!
This one does blaze, SerenOne...and you
know that I LOOOOOVVVEEEEE  it!!!
Hugs,
Ethel



Ericc
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15 posted 2004-05-29 02:44 PM


Beautiful!

Eric

serenity blaze
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16 posted 2004-05-30 01:58 AM




Thanks for reading, and yes, it was a bit different from me, wasn't it?

Love is lovely...

sighs, hugs and


Janet Marie
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17 posted 2004-05-30 03:38 PM


I'd love to dance with you real slow
drifting in a dawn rose red
holding you
chest to chest
swaying near the pond
of beg
churling mine
beneath the bend
of curling there
just so...

careful cuddle all of me
loving just beneath your breath
I beg
a
suckling of neck
I am
existant in the must
of this
fitting
just between
the breasts
as if
it's perfect pitch

=======================


*smiling* at you and your alliterated assonance...
OH and the poem too... lol

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18 posted 2004-05-30 09:51 PM


such vivid images, and so beautiful. This might be a favorite from you. I had to go back and read it twice I enjoyed it so much!
~Live and Laugh~

The memories are worth the pain when the happiness is outweighs the sorrow
~Bella~

Susan Caldwell
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19 posted 2004-05-30 10:17 PM


Loved this side of you Karen.

(and sometimes all it takes is but a simple pause).

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

muted
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20 posted 2004-05-30 10:20 PM


ummm.... ..come back to steal it into my library
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