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ethome
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0 posted 2004-05-28 08:33 PM


Met her in Starbucks sipping java
she opened up so easily
She talked fast but her passion
seemed forced from hidden grief.
Like desire that's gone mad
her soul was stirred an restless
an my dry hopes she unclad
while she kept my interest tested

I learned she owed her life's cares
to a man that was married
but he kept her dreams so impaired
you could feel the weight she carried
she longed to have her own say
because she suffered from neglect
so I met her there everyday
and I paid her wish respect

One day I asked her home to my place
Because she'd loaned my heart her soul
And she seemed so displaced
I wanted her to know

The past can be a prison where we all do time
But everyone escapes somewhere down the line
In the end there's no future that can keep the lonely out
Because there's love to discover on the other side of doubt.

So I tried to stroke her sore heart chords
and ease the pain she'd reaped
but she turned off as I was getting close
and stared away from me.
I could hear her heart when I'd begin
my slow hands would shake her voice
I'd speak soft cares to let her in
but distance was her choice.

Then late one night she came to me
her face was blank unsure.
So we talked to set her mind at ease
like rain her heart thoughts poured
the mind she spilled gave me a chill
As she made confession quotes
She said she had new dreams to fill
as her heart filled up with hope

So I asked her what was on her mind
because I knew she'd come so clean.
She said she'd done her time
at last she could believe

The past can be a prison where many have done time
But everyone escapes somewhere down the line
In the end there's no future that can keep the lonely out
Because there's love to discover on the other side of doubt.

That was the day she came to stay......fade.........

[This message has been edited by ethome (05-30-2004 11:00 AM).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2004-05-28 09:12 PM


Eric

Always, so well done!!  And the wisdom in:

"The past is just a prison where we all do time
But everyone escapes somewhere down the line
In the end there's no future that can keep the lonely out
Because there's nothing left but lovers on the other side of doubt."

I've done some time there.  


Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2004-05-28 09:28 PM


ethome
A wonderful write, enjoyed the read very much.

MGROVES
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3 posted 2004-05-28 11:47 PM


excellant write, felt it too


iliana
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4 posted 2004-05-29 12:39 PM


"The past is just a prison where we all do time
But everyone escapes somewhere down the line
In the end there's no future that can keep the lonely out
Because there's nothing left but lovers on the other side of doubt."

What a good tune!  I can almost hear it.   .....jo


passing shadows
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displaced
5 posted 2004-05-29 03:30 AM


excellent!
ethome
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6 posted 2004-05-29 03:58 AM


Thank you Martie.....Nice to hear from you! I appreciate the kind words very much...


Hello Sy....Thanks for the thumbs up my friend and for droppin in to read this...


MGROVES thanks for feeling this I was hoping people could....

iliana I appreciate you quoting that chorus because that's my fav part and I hope others like it as well...

Passing, it's always good to hear from you and thanks for the E word!

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

GlisteningRain
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7 posted 2004-05-29 05:40 AM


*liked the chrous too* ^_^
HopeS
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8 posted 2004-05-29 05:54 AM


Absolutely wonderful words , yes your heart does sing out a true song ....I love the chorus too

Hope

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9 posted 2004-05-29 10:55 PM


learned she owed her life's cares
to a man that was married
but he kept her dreams so impaired
you could feel the weight she carried
she longed to have her own say
because she suffered from neglect
so I met her there everyday
and I paid her due respect

Seems we all can drown our sorrows over coffee as easily as anything else   As usual, 1st class m'friend.

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2004-05-30 12:45 PM


Fade...James
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