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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2004-05-28 01:06 PM


Lavender

by the bed

and
in
my
head


the undulating fears

scale white cliff face

to somewhere

that scent

has no calm.


She is no drug

and so I wonder why I can't move

death-still

the nausea of floating visions

about mind that boasts weightlessness

even though you're on it

rocking the boat.



Lavender?

How far can you move in a year

without miles

this anniversary makes me sink

in
an
easy
second

and exile



This

inhale~exhale

of a year

a motionless tangle

woven with shifting imaginations

thinking I saw you

clung to the underside

of a ship

breath still lingers

exactly

there and then.


Adrift

I wonder with my eyes closed

if you can only float so far

without trying


when

I was sure

I'd done all I could.




© Copyright 2004 gj - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
1 posted 2004-05-28 01:15 PM


Oh yes..this is sweet!

Hi Gemma!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2004-05-28 01:39 PM


This

inhale~exhale

of a year

a motionless tangle

woven with shifting imaginations
=====================================


when

I was sure

I'd done all I could.
===========================


ahhh gemma-girlie..this is a bittersweet beauty...a heart sigh.
I so love the way you write.

Duncan
Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

3 posted 2004-05-28 07:27 PM


"She is no drug

and so I wonder why I can't move

death-still

the nausea of floating visions

about mind that boasts weightlessness

even though you're on it

rocking the boat."


Give ya 50 bucks and a pack of Marlboro's for that verse...  
Impressive as always Gem...

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

4 posted 2004-05-28 08:44 PM


She is no drug

and so I wonder why I can't move

death-still

the nausea of floating visions

about mind that boasts weightlessness

even though you're on it

rocking the boat.


This is a WOWSER poem Gem, the imagery is just fab.

It's so good to read you.

Maree


The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
5 posted 2004-05-28 10:11 PM


hug
iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
6 posted 2004-05-29 02:22 AM


Amazing write, gemjop --
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
7 posted 2004-05-29 03:24 AM


you always touch me
MGROVES
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Posts 3802
california
8 posted 2004-05-29 03:28 AM


yes amazing


Kaoru
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since 2003-06-07
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where the wild flowers grow
9 posted 2004-05-29 05:19 AM


Wow....
GlisteningRain
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since 2004-05-06
Posts 103
The clouds
10 posted 2004-05-29 05:21 AM


Like a Goddess. Very Skillful. ^_^
Ericc
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since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178

11 posted 2004-05-29 02:51 PM


I love your writing...and this is
why.

Eric

garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
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Florida, USA
12 posted 2004-05-29 03:00 PM


Beautiful writing, my little friend. Good to see you.
Would your anniversary have been soon? Gary and I
are having one tomorrow.
Hugs,  
Ethel

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace
13 posted 2004-05-29 04:52 PM


"How far can you move in a year

without miles"

aches
i KNOW this ache



Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
14 posted 2004-05-29 05:03 PM


Yes ... I understand.
Tough and beautiful.
Love, Margherita

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
15 posted 2004-05-29 11:56 PM


How far can you move in a year

without miles

this anniversary makes me sink

in
an
easy
second

and exile

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Outstanding poetry~
you're so good, gemma gemma~


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