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MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

0 posted 2004-05-28 12:41 PM

Look deep
into my eyes
where my
soul lies

Go deep
into my body
feel my souls cries

When your
about to part
and go in again
Stop
to touch my heart

Release
the pain within

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2004-05-28 12:45 PM

oh
how beautiful

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

2 posted 2004-05-28 12:49 PM

thankyou dixie

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

3 posted 2004-05-28 02:20 PM

excellent use of rhyme...
great job!
take care,
amy

"When life gives you sorrow, may you experience the spirit of laughter"

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-05-28 02:41 PM

Ah yes, please . . . I can feel this one.

Susan

The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2004-05-28 05:31 PM

Lovely...James

rosepetals25

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since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

6 posted 2004-05-28 05:37 PM

I like this alot.. I can definately relate to your words.

Tara

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

7 posted 2004-05-28 06:04 PM

THANKYOU ALL

HopeS
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

8 posted 2004-05-28 11:05 PM

beautifully expressed ... yes all we need is the touch of understanding

Hope

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

9 posted 2004-05-28 11:14 PM

oh hope you got it exactly how it was written. just once i wish another could see and feel that as you. GOD BLESS YOU

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

10 posted 2004-05-29 12:17 PM

Though each of us feels our own pain and express it differently, you touched on the commality of it. Good job!

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

11 posted 2004-05-29 03:37 AM

thankyou very much

spritrider87
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since 2003-05-31

Posts 294
NH

12 posted 2004-08-27 10:47 AM

really good. i wish someone could do that for me.

lost and afraid i am calling out to you light angel.

GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

13 posted 2004-08-27 04:39 PM

Soft and melancholy...
This is beautiful.

Always, Alyssa

Poems are made by fools like me,
But only God can make a tree.
Joyce kilmer

peppermint35
Senior Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 1106
Texas, USA

14 posted 2004-10-23 08:41 AM

good job

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

15 posted 2004-11-12 08:19 AM

wonderful. definitely touching.

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